Talk:2019 Marrakesh ePrix/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 06:26, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * It was unaltered from — What was unaltered?
 * The track MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * mandatory attack-mode activation zone — What's that?
 * It is a zone positioned off the racing line that drivers are required to drive through to increase the amount of power in their cars in a bid to increase competitiveness in Formula E. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * the timing loops — What are those?
 * They are the loops drivers must go over to activate attack mode. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Practice
 * The first sentence of the second paragraph is confusing, and a bit of a run-on; splitting it in two might clear things up.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It's still the same. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:05, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Changed MWright96 (talk) 05:35, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What sentence are you changing? The first sentence of the second paragraph is this one: The second practice session was held in warmer weather and teams became cautious with their tyres as cooling for the Spark SRT05e car between the session and qualifying was prioritised due to the car's predominantly larger enclosed cockpit. --Usernameunique (talk) 05:53, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Now done; I misread it as the first paragraph MWright96 (talk) 06:06, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm still confused by this, and neither the original source nor the archived version seem to be working. The second half of the sentence jumps from being cautious with tires, to cooling cars, to a larger enclosed cockpit. What's the relationship between these three things? --Usernameunique (talk) 21:26, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Have removed this sentence MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 19 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Saturday's 75-minute afternoon qualifying session was divided into two groups of five cars and two groups of six entries — "entries" means "cars" also? If so, I think it's clearer if you just say "two groups of five cars and two groups of six."
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * he was the fastest driver in the first sector — What's the first sector?
 * Removed since it is irrelevant MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Buemi led the second session with Piquet joining him in the top six — What position was Piquet?
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Inconsistent capitalization of Super Pole/super pole.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Each driver was mandated to activate the attack mode system twice — Were they required to use it twice, or simply permitted to use it up to twice?
 * Yes drivers were required by regulations to use it a certain number of times as determined by Formula E themselves. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Vergne lunged at Bird — "lunged" sounds odd.
 * Rewritten MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * without losing a large amount of time during activation — How would attack mode cause one to lose time?
 * Because that is the nature of attack mode that it will lose a driver time because it is off the racing line and plays a part in a team's strategy during the race. MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * on the straight linking turns turn and eleven — Something's off here.
 * Added MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * he fell to seventh behind López on the next lap — Who fell to seventh?
 * Sam Bird MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * All drivers, except for Sims and di Grassi, activated their second attack modes three minutes later in anticipation the safety car would be withdrawn later than planned than had been anticipated by the remainder of the field. It proved to be so as the safety car stayed on the track until 20 seconds were left and Sims and di Grassi used their second attack modes beforehand. — This is somewhat confusing (why would they activate the attack mode while the safety car was on the track? Wouldn't they not be able to benefit from it?) and needs some revision (e.g., "than planned than had been anticipated").
 * Drivers were allowed in that season to activate attack mode while the safety car was on track and they can either benefit or lose out depending how long the safety car is on track for MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * So it sounds like when the safety car came out, seven minutes remained for everyone to use attack mode one more time. All but two drivers used it with four minutes to go; what does it mean that they "anticipat[ed] the safety car would be withdrawn later than had been anticipated by the remainder of the field"? It sounds like (almost) the entire field anticipated the same thing. And what was the point of using it then—can you talk me what they were trying to achieve by using it then? Also, I think you're missing a citation for these sentences—the one used doesn't talk about the strategy or di Grassi, although I see some on Google that mention both. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Have reworded instead MWright96 (talk) 05:35, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Was the race scheduled to last for a certain amount of time (e.g., a 30-minute race), or laps (e.g., a 20-lap race)?
 * 45 minutes plus one extra full lap of the track to be competed after time has elapsed MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I'd add that to the beginning of the section. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Added MWright96 (talk) 05:35, 25 April 2020 (UTC)


 * d'Ambrosio on 48 points — The charts say he added 25 points to make 40.
 * Fixed MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Overall
 * , comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:26, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Have made changes to the article and have replied where appropriate MWright96 (talk) 07:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , couple replies above. --Usernameunique (talk) 02:22, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 18:41, 19 May 2020 (UTC)