Talk:2019 Shanghai Masters/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 12:59, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

Going to review. MWright96 (talk) 12:59, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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 * Pass/Fail:

General

 * All of the hyphens in the prose and references should be replaced by en dashes
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:27, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * "The 2019 Shanghai Masters was a professional non-ranking snooker tournament that took place in Shanghai, China from 9 to 15 September 2019." - perhaps a mention of the location within Shanghai that the tournament was played in?
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "The event was the 12th Shanghai Masters event, first held in 2007." - more grammatically correct; It was the 12th edition of the Shanghai Masters, which was first held in 2007.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Ronnie O'Sullivan was the defending champion" - should be Ronnie O'Sullivan was the tournament's defending champion,
 * I don't see this as an improvement - Do we need the extra word? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "having defeated Barry Hawkins 11–9 in the 2018 Shanghai Masters final" - 2018 final,
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "and also having won the event in the year prior in 2017." - better; and also having won the tournament in 2017.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "The prize fund for the event was at a total of £751,000" - I would say that The total prize fund was £751,000 is an improvement in terms of conciseness
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:32, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Overview

 * "The Shanghai Masters is an invitational non-ranking snooker tournament open to the top 16 ranked players on the World Snooker Tour as well as selected Chinese players. The players consist of the top-16 in the world rankings after the 2019 International Championship, as well as eight Chinese players. The invited Chinese players include four players not ranked in the top-16 in the world rankings, two players from the Chinese Billiard Snooker Association under-21 rankings and two from China’s Amateur Masters series." - This whole portion of text will require citations to verify the information
 * Added some sources Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:50, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "The defending champion was Ronnie O'Sullivan who won the 2018 event defeating Barry Hawkins 11-9 in the final." - by beating Barry Hawkins 11–9 in the final.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:50, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "O'Sullivan has also won the event in 2017." - O'Sullivan also won the 2017 tournament.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:50, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Each invited Chinese player played one of the players seeded 9-16 in the first round." - World Snooker does not specially state this. Snooker.org does though, so that source should be used here
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:50, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * How about mention the tournament was broadcast in Thailand by True Sport?
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:50, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Prize fund

 * The highest break and the total prize fund figures are not mentioned in the two sources attached to it. Another source is required to verify it
 * total fund was easy to source, but couldn't find one for the highest break, so I've removed. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:55, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Tournament summary

 * "The tournament was held from 9 to 15 September 2019. The first round featured 9-16 seeded players against Chinese players." - both of these sentences are not attached to any citations to verify them. They require one so that the information can be checked to see if it is correct
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "O'Sullivan completing a 6-0 win" - how about mentioning O'Sullivan win over Zhang Yi was a whitewash as stated in the Eurosport source instead?
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Shaun Murphy defeated Jack Lisowski 6-1 in the quarter-final, before playing Mark Allen in the semi-final. Allen had defeated World Champion Judd Trump also 6-1 in the last quarter-final." - These two sentences are not mentioned in the World Snooker source attached to them. Please use another citation.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Allen had defeated World Champion Judd Trump also 6-1" - better; Allen had also defeated the world champion Judd Trump 6–1
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "before winning the next four frames in-a-row to win 10-3." - either to claim a 10–3 victory or to secure a 10–3 victory. would be better
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "including a break of 124 " - not mentioned by either the Eurosport nor the World Snooker draw sheet scores. Please find or use another source to verify the break of 124
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Murphy won both frame 18 and 19 with breaks of 82" - Nothing in the Eurosport source that states Shaun Murphy made a break of 82 in frame 18. Another reference is required here
 * Removed. 82 isn't that important Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "The win was O'Sullivan's third straight Shanghai Masters tournament win." - repetition of the word "win"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Century breaks

 * "Barry Hawkins completed the highest break of the event, a 142." - better; Barry Hawkins completed the tournament's highest break of 142 in the fourth frame of his second round match against John Higgins.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:33, 13 February 2020 (UTC)

Overall there are sections of text that are not verified because they have the incorrect reference attached to it or not mentioned by the sources at all. There are also some references which are duplicates of another and prose issues are present. Will put on hold for the time being. MWright96 (talk) 14:06, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, MWright! I think I got it all. Just doing a little bit of formatting, and it should be good to go. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:08, 13 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Will now promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 20:36, 13 February 2020 (UTC)