Talk:2019 Tour de France/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:09, 11 March 2020 (UTC)

Will review this article. MWright96 (talk) 17:09, 11 March 2020 (UTC)
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 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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 * 1) It is stable.
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Lead

 * Wikilink the first mention of the word teams to cycling team
 * "to take the first yellow of the Tour." - yellow jersey
 * "which was shortened by bad weather." - inclement
 * "The team classification was won by Movistar Team and Alaphilippe won the award for most combative rider." - close repetition of the word "won"
 * "which was shortened by bad weather." - inclement
 * "The team classification was won by Movistar Team and Alaphilippe won the award for most combative rider." - close repetition of the word "won"
 * "The team classification was won by Movistar Team and Alaphilippe won the award for most combative rider." - close repetition of the word "won"

Teams

 * Wikilink the first mention of the term team to Cycling team like in the first query of the previous section
 * "and all of its eighteen UCI WorldTeams were entitled," - should the text in bold be changed to 18 per MOS:NUMERAL since numbers are used earlier on?
 * I write numerals up to "twenty" unless it's a stage, distance, exact time or if there's a few numerals in one sentence. It gets very confusing/messy when there's so many... BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "The three French teams and one Belgian team" - try to avoid close repetition of the same or similar word if possible
 * "The three French teams and one Belgian team" - try to avoid close repetition of the same or similar word if possible

Pre-race favourites

 * The entire third paragraph could be better off divided into two to improve readability and comfort
 * "Fuglsang had enjoyed a highly successful spring campaign," - it is generally not recommenced to mention seasons per MOS:SEASON
 * Reworded to "spring classics campaign", which is what the early-season one-day races are known as. BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Reworded to "spring classics campaign", which is what the early-season one-day races are known as. BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

Route and stages

 * "It was the second time the Grand Départ has taken place" - had
 * "It also marks 100 years since the race leader's yellow jersey " - marked
 * "that featured the steep cobbled Muur van Geraardsbergen climb," - try to avoid MOS:SEAOFBLUE wikilinking
 * Reworded to "that featured the Muur van Geraardsbergen climb, an iconic steep cobbled climb of the Tour of Flanders "monument" race," BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "that featured the steep cobbled Muur van Geraardsbergen climb," - try to avoid MOS:SEAOFBLUE wikilinking
 * Reworded to "that featured the Muur van Geraardsbergen climb, an iconic steep cobbled climb of the Tour of Flanders "monument" race," BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

First week: Belgium, north-eastern to southern France

 * "but following him crashing in the closing 2 km (1.2 mi)," - I believe this section of text can be reworded a little different because I did not 100 percent understand what was supposed to state
 * Reworded to "Stage 1's bunch sprint finish was won by 's Mike Teunissen. He was iniatlly a member of the team's sprint train who were leading out their designated sprinter Dylan Groenewegen, but following Groenewegen's crash in the closing 2 km, Teunissen was free to race in the sprint."
 * "gain a lead of over 8 minutes." - more than
 * "The gap down to under a minute in the final kilometres," - This appears to be an incomplete portion of text
 * Reworded to "With the breakaway's advantage down to under a minute in the final kilometres," BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "and avoided an early disaster." - think this is a tad informal
 * Reworded to "Defending champion Geraint Thomas survived his second crash in this edition of the Tour."? BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "put in an effort to reel him in" - same issue as the third query in this sub-section
 * Reworded/removed large parts of stage 9. BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Reworded/removed large parts of stage 9. BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

Second week: Southern France and Pyrenees

 * "A notable abandonment of the stage was the reigning world time trial champion Rohan Dennis (Bahrain–Merida), a favourite for the following stage's time trial." - maybe you can state the reason why Dennis withdrew from the race?
 * It was all rather bizarre at the time, and he only just spoke about it in January. I don't feel we need to delve into it. Now "A notable abandonment of the stage, for personal reasons, was". BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "achieving a "'stunning" victory on a day" - according to whom?
 * Changed to "unexpected". BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed as its superfluous. Now: "achieving a victory on a day where he was expected to lose time to riders such as Thomas". BaldBoris 13:50, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "moving himself up to fourth overall." - progressing
 * "Alaphilippe was beating expectations" - more formal; exceeding
 * I take it you meant "beating" → "exceeding". BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "who now had an 85 points lead" - can be changed to an 85-point lead or a lead of 85 points
 * "who now had an 85 points lead" - can be changed to an 85-point lead or a lead of 85 points

Third week: Southern France, Alps and finale in Paris

 * "with led of 37 seconds." - typo; the text in bold must be written as a lead
 * "The 34-strong breakaway reduced" - was reduced or had been reduced
 * "and was two minutes behind over the top." - not sure what the phrase "over the top" refers to in this instance
 * Changed to "at the summit". BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "The bad weather also caused the penultimate stage" - more formal; inclement
 * Delink Latin American per MOS:OVERLINK since it is a major geographical region
 * "The bad weather also caused the penultimate stage" - more formal; inclement
 * Delink Latin American per MOS:OVERLINK since it is a major geographical region
 * Delink Latin American per MOS:OVERLINK since it is a major geographical region

Classification leadership and minor prizes

 * "These bonuses replaced the special sprints that were a feature in the 2018 edition." - perhaps it can be stated why this change occurred if that information is available
 * "the leading team was the team" - try to avoid close repetition of the word "team" and use an alternative word where possible
 * Changed to "the leading team was the one". BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "The riders on the team that lead this classification" - led
 * "The winner wore a red number bib the following stage." - for the
 * "awarded by a jury.[87][83]" - refs should be in numerical order
 * "The team classification winners were given €50,000." - how about earned instead for variety?
 * "Thibaut Pinot won the Jacques Goddet and Egan Bernal won the Henri Desgrange." - try not to repeat the word "won" closely in the same sentence
 * Changed to "Thibaut Pinot won the Jacques Goddet and Egan Bernal claimed the Henri Desgrange" BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "and Egan Bernal won the Henri Desgrange.[64][35]" - same issue as the fifth query in this sub-section
 * "Thibaut Pinot won the Jacques Goddet and Egan Bernal won the Henri Desgrange." - try not to repeat the word "won" closely in the same sentence
 * Changed to "Thibaut Pinot won the Jacques Goddet and Egan Bernal claimed the Henri Desgrange" BaldBoris 13:41, 12 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "and Egan Bernal won the Henri Desgrange.[64][35]" - same issue as the fifth query in this sub-section
 * "and Egan Bernal won the Henri Desgrange.[64][35]" - same issue as the fifth query in this sub-section

UCI rankings

 * "The points accrued by Egan Bernal moved him from 23rd to seventh in the individual World Ranking " - should that be changed to sixth according to the ranking tables below?