Talk:2020–21 SC East Bengal season/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 02:54, 27 April 2021 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  02:54, 27 April 2021 (UTC)


 * The short name for East Bengal should be included in the lead with parentheses.
 * ✅  Saha ❯❯❯  Stay safe    08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "its first 100 years" Centennial?
 * ✅  Saha ❯❯❯  Stay safe    08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Kolkata Derby should be linked in the lead.
 * ✅  Saha ❯❯❯  Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "Then they were undefeated for the next seven matches." Not the best to start a sentence with "then".
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "four goals from 17 matches" Four goals in 17 matches?
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "East Bengal officially announced that Balwant had signed a two-year contract with the team on 12 April 2020." Balwant need a link, and was this the first action for the team's pre-season?
 * ✅. Yes, first action. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "The next day the club signed former fullback Lalramchullova back" No need to mention former when he's still playing as a fullback.
 * Here, former is intended as former player. He played for EB in 2018-19, then went to rival club in 2019-20. Again came back in 2020-21. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * No need to say upcoming when the article is in past tense, the season's over.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:21, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "goalkeeper Sankar Roy from Mohun Bagan, defenders Mohammed Irshad from Gokulam Kerala and Keegan Pereira from Jamshedpur and Girik Khosla from Punjab FC." Would replace the last two "and"s with commas.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Can't seem to open the reference, or maybe it's just me.
 * Didn't run the bot for a long time, and the link died. Marked as dead. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "Defenders Anil Chawan from ATK and Vikas Saini" Lowercase d for defenders.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "autumn 2019" Capitalize Autumn.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "the de facto]" Extra bracket.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "before the official exit, i.e. 1 May 2020" Better to say "before the official exit on 1 May 2020."
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "This was the first time this had happened in Indian Football." Could be merged to say, "the first time the clause was activated in Indian football".
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "the club and Chief Minister Mamata Banerjee, announced at the state secretariat Nabanna, that Kolkata-based firm Shree Cement was the club's new investor." Would sound better without commas.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "The club announced former India captain Renedy Singh would be the team's new assistant coach[54] and Liverpool legend Robbie Fowler was signed as the team's new head coach on 9 October." IN most cases the hierarchy has the head coach mentioned first, then the assistant coach.
 * Here it was opposite. Like a surprise, big things announced later. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "He would be assisted" He as in Fowler?
 * Yes. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Background section seems to be missing significant departures.
 * Or loans either, but I can see them interspersed in the ISL overview section.
 * Because of the force majeure clause most of the contracts terminated at once. Also, after being released from club, not enough coverage regarding them. But, added few of them. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "reached Goa on 16 October for" Arrived at Goa.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * No need to mention that East Bengal beat Kerala Blasters 3-1 twice in a paragraph.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Ref 120 died (Hindustan Times talking about Goa bubble).
 * ✅ Corrected. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Highlanders should be capitalized in this case when talking about NorthEast United.
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "on 10 December" Capitalize "On".
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Try to avoid words that might be editorializing.
 * Tried to rectify this. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 10:30, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Assuming good faith on the Bengali sources.

That should be it. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  07:50, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 10:46, 28 April 2021 (UTC)