Talk:2021 British Athletics Marathon and 20 km Walk Trial/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:55, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

Am going to review MWright96 (talk) 17:55, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
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Lead

 * Wikilink 20 km walk and marathon only on the first mention outside of bold text
 * ✅ Joseph2302 (talk) 10:35, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Background

 * "UK Athletics had considered using the Manchester Marathon as a trial event or holding a trial event near Dorney Lake," - try to avoid using trail event twice in a single sentence
 * "It was the first dedicated marathon trial event since 1980, as the London Marathon is traditionally used as a qualification event" - repetition of "event"
 * "Due to the COVID-19 pandemic," - don't think the name of the disease is needed since it is already mentioned at the end of the previous sentence
 * Who is Richmond Runfest?
 * "almost 1 mile (1.6 km) in length." - could do with a little rewriting since it is too close to the source verifying this information
 * "the qualification times were 2:11:30 for the men's race, and 2:29:30 for the women's race." - repetition of "race"


 * ✅ Including as much as I can about Richmond RunFest. They organise running events in Richmond area of London, and can't find much else about them. Joseph2302 (talk) 17:04, 7 May 2021 (UTC)

Competitors

 * "whose personal best time was under 2:10:00," - set at which event?
 * "Other competitors included Cameron Corbishley, Daniel King, and Dominic King; Dominic King had set a British record" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
 * "The race also featured Gemma Bridge, Heather Lewis and Erika Kelly," - maybe switch the names of Kelly and Lewis so its in alphaebtical order?
 * Marathon and 20 km walk should be wikilinked to the relevant articles only on the first
 * Wikilink the terms 10 km walk to 10 kilometres race walk, 3,000 metres to 3000 metres race walk and 5,000 metres to 5000 metres race walk


 * ✅ Joseph2302 (talk) 10:00, 7 May 2021 (UTC)

Race summary

 * "The 20 km walk event commenced at 06:00 UTC, and the marathon event commenced at 08:00 UTC." - repetition of "event"
 * "His time was 40 seconds inside the qualifying time." - repetition of "time"
 * "which contained only Connor and Aadan.[8] Aaden finished the race in third;" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
 * Personal best and Jess Piasecki are linked in this section and don't need to be since they are already linked in the section coming before this one
 * "It was Davis' personal best time, and was inside the Olympic qualifying time by over two minutes." - same point as the second query in this section
 * "by over two minutes." - more than
 * "which was 30 seconds outside the qualifying time,[8] but was a personal best time.[14]" - same point as the second query in this section
 * "he was at pace with the qualifying time, before his pace slowed due to the weather." - Anyway the text in bold can be worded to avoid repetition of the word "pace"
 * Done all of these now. Joseph2302 (talk) 15:02, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Results

 * Per WP:DTAB, tables need a caption: add |+ your table caption to the top, or if the caption would duplicate a nearby section header, you can make it |+ instead so that it only shows up for screen reader software.
 * ✅ caption added, don't think it needs to be more descriptive than just saying "men's/women's finishers". Let me know if you disagree. <b style="color:#0033ab">Joseph</b><b style="color:#000000">2302</b> (talk) 16:04, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks acceptable MWright96 (talk) 18:26, 7 May 2021 (UTC)