Talk:2021 Masters (snooker)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:07, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's about it for a first pass. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 14:41, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "The event invited the top 16 players " -> "Sixteen players were invited to the event"
 * Changed Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Maybe you can say "The World Professional Billiards and Snooker Association " did the inviting. (the infobox has World Snooker as well?)
 * No source actually makes this claim. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Then merge the broadcast/behind closed doors sentences.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Worth linking "frame" in the lead.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " The highest break of the event " did that also receive financial award?
 * Added Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "invitational snooker tournament ... invited to participate" isn't that what an "invitational" means?
 * Reworded Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "The 2021 Masters is the second" is or was? Check tenses.
 * Working. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "The 16 highest-ranked players according to the world rankings after the 2020 UK Championship in December 2020 were invited to the event.[5] [6] " didn't you just say something like that already? And no spaces between rrefs.
 * I've removed the first version. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You have a different link for COVID-19 here.
 * I don't see an issue particularly the first link is more about the restrictions, whilst when we talk about in the body, it's about the disease itself. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes but to the reader it looks the same, the text after the pipe is the same but the link is different, that's misleading. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 15:43, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Sure, I've repiped the first one. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:53, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " Joe Perry replaced Trump in the draw, while Gary Wilson replaced Lisowski.[7] Anthony McGill, ranked 17th, would have been the first reserve player but declined to travel to the event,[8] whilst Barry Hawkins, ranked 18th tested positive for COVID-19.[9]" I would put this the other way round, and say that 17th declined, 18th was positive for COVID, so 19th and 20th (presumably??) played instead.
 * Good idea. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * No need to link major geographical locations like "London".
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "played without spectators" link to behind closed doors as you did in the lead.
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " met the remaining eight participants" how were they placed into the draw, randomly or on their ranking?
 * added Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "first time by sports betting company Betfred" might be nice to say they replaced last season's sponsors Dafabet?
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Lead: total prize pool of £750,000, infobox: Total prize fund	£725,000, prose: The prize fund for the event was £725,000.
 * Fixed Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Gary Wilson in the opening match. Gary Wilson, world ranking number 18, made his debut at" merge, e.g. "Gary Wilson, world ranking number 18, in the opening match, who was making his debut at"?
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "competing against John Higgins for four days" in practice or another tournament?
 * Added Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Post match," -> "After the match"
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Defending champion Stuart Bingham defeated Shaun Murphy 6–3" full stop.
 * Caption headers always throw me. Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "The first quarter-final was" no need to repeat quarter-final.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "professional competitive match between the two since they turned professional" probably don't need the first "professional".
 * removed first usage. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * spellbinding - put that in quotes.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "whilst" -> while.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " Stuart Bingham won" no need for the first name.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Ken Doherty, the 1997 world champion, commented" you already introduced Ken, so move that world champ stuff there, and no need to repeat his first name here.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "He also won in 1999.)[59] " don't see the need for this to be in parentheses, just merge it nicely.
 * It's not something I added, it doesn't really matter in the context. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "a re-spotted black. After a" overlinked.
 * removed Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "safety" link.
 * Linked Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I just noticed last year's article is featured. Surprised no-one asked you to describe the scoring mechanism of snooker along with all rules...
 * I dodged a bullet. I am awaiting someone to expect a note on every page that needs to explain that snooker is a cue sport... a sport played with a cue, a cue being a piece of wood. :P Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "by John Higgins in his quarter-final match with Ronnie O'Sullivan" why the first names again? And all the players are overlinked here, no?
 * Removed Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:28, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Refs 5 and 58 need en-dashes, not hyphens.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:34, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ref 30 why not Eurosport UK? Not sure why that's not just Eurosport throughout to be honest.
 * Yeah, Eurosport is better. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:34, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * BBC refs are mostly BBC Sport, not italics.
 * Sorry, to confirm, this should be as a publisher, not as the work? Or, did you want them in italics? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:34, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I follow our article usage, i.e. BBC Sport. But either way, just be consistent. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 15:45, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Should now be fully consistent. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:53, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Hi, let me know if there is more to look at. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:34, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * , just a couple of responses above. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 15:46, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Okeydokes, happy to promote. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 16:17, 12 March 2021 (UTC)