Talk:2021 Munster abuse case/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 21:59, 22 January 2022 (UTC)

Reading now. Before I start, two quick questions, if I may: Thanks, --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:59, 22 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Is the article up-to-date? Any news about the sentencing, which should have taken place already?
 * Are major changes to the article to be expected in the near future?
 * Avoid single sentence paragraphs where possible via MOS:PARA.


 * Hi there, thanks for your patience. I'm just going to look over it now. The article is not up-to-date, but I'll update it this minute. Once I have it updated, given that the update is just about victim impact statements and the sentencing results, I would expect no more major changes to be made to this article for quite some time. I will adjust the paragraphs accordingly. Thank you. Xx78900 (talk) 13:19, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Okay I actually have to run, but I'll be back tonight, I want to have this article up-to-date before the day is out. Xx78900 (talk) 14:28, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Where are we standing on this? Will you ping me once you are done? At least the lead does not seem to be up-to date. Thanks, --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:53, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Sorry I forgot to update the lede when did the body. All of the info should now be up-to-date. @Jens Lallensack Xx78900 (talk) 11:09, 2 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Sorry for the delay, I'm just very occupied in RL. Please see my comments below.
 * We usually avoid citations in the lead except for very controversial stuff, since everything should be mentioned in the body anyways. ✅
 * "notably low IQ" – I can't find "notably" in the source, it just says "low IQ"; what is the reasoning here? ✅
 * melatonin – link? ✅
 * Parts of the section "Living conditions" is repetitive since living conditions are partly covered in the "backgrounds" section. Maybe remove that information from the background section to improve structure? ✅
 * I recommend to avoid very short paragraphs (with one or two sentences) by combining them, see MOS:LINEBREAKS. ✅
 * Each of the accused had their own defense counsel. – I think it should be stated here how many were accused. And here I see another problem; until now, only the two parents and one uncle was mentioned. The uncles do not appear in the background section (while the parents do); it would help to mention them as well I think. ✅
 * What is Gardaí? Should be introduced and linked. ✅
 * The father of the five children, aged 56, was charged with 34 different counts, including rape, – I think it would make sense to remove the examples here, as they are listed anyways in the next sentence on the ones they were found guilty. It reads very repetitive. ✅
 * She described as being so thin upon arrival that – "him" missing? ✅
 * parents.Since – space missing? ✅ --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:04, 25 February 2022 (UTC)

Status query
Jens Lallensack, Xx78900, where does this nomination stand? The most recent edit by Xx78900 to the article was on 7 February, and the most recent edit to this page was over a month ago. Any chance of it being completed soon? Thank you very much. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:41, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
 * If the above outstanding comments are addressed, I may pass it; they are mostly minor points. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 17:46, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks to the IP for the fixes! I am promoting now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:19, 2 April 2022 (UTC)