Talk:2021 West Coast Eagles women's season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking at this! —  Ghost River  22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Good

Background

 * "2020 was their first year in the AFL Women's competition." "They began playing in the AFL Women's league during the 2020 season."
 * "mens' team" "men's team"
 * "continued on being"

Playing list

 * "a trade that involves West Coast" "a trade that involved West Coast"
 * Link 2020 AFL Women's draft in the second paragraph and delink in the third
 * Which exact phrase do you think should be linked? Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Mixed sentence tense in the sentence beginning "If players were undrafted"

Season summary

 * Quite long without subheads; maybe break up by month like baseball season GAs?
 * I broke it up by rounds. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
 * "The fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020, however it changed several times after that due to restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic" "The planned fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020; continued restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic, however, forced it to change several times"
 * The way it's currently set up, "reigning premiers" feels a bit WP:EASTEREGGy to me; should mention earlier that Adelaide are the reigning champs
 * "for West Coast. Brianna" "for West Coast, but three players suffered injuries:"
 * "This meant that" I'm a little confused about what "this" is supposed to mean; is it because it's a Western Derby?
 * "because a knife fell off" "when a knife fell off"
 * Missing period after "four outs for round 2"
 * "wasn't considered too bad" "was not considered a total failure"
 * "Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore played, after their injuries ended up not being serious" "Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore's injuries were minor enough to allow them to return"
 * was also due to play her first game back from her knee injury, but was a late out due to her knee repetitive phrasing
 * I'm assuming "Grace Kelly" should be targeted towards Grace Kelly (footballer) and not the princess it currently links to

Awards

 * "Mikayla Bowen was named" "Bowen was also named"

General comments

 * Images are properly licensed and relevant
 * Images should be moved slightly to avoid MOS:SANDWICH issues
 * Per MOS:CAPTION, the captions, as full sentences, should end in periods
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio score looks great at 7.4%

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! —  Ghost River  22:58, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * I have done all changes bar one. See my comment above. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I've made the last change myself. Passing now —  Ghost River  16:19, 14 November 2021 (UTC)