Talk:24 (TV series)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer:  Sp33dyphil  "Ad astra" 09:46, 3 July 2011 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "First broadcast on" is that the right tense? ✅ Changed to "Premiered"
 * "the show ran for spanned 192 episodes" ✅
 * "while a feature film of the same name is" please wikify "feature film of the same name" ✅
 * "Bauer is the only character to have appeared in all eight seasons, as well as appearing in every episode of the series." → "Bauer is the only character to have appeared in every episode of the series." This automatically means that only Bauer has appeared in all eight seasons. ✅
 * "begins with him his working" See User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing ✅
 * "Los Angeles-based" and "highly-proficient" addition of hyphens ✅
 * "Jack Bauer's racing" addition of "'s" ✅
 * "conspiracies which deals ing with" ✅
 * "including the Best Drama Series" is the necessary, since "Best Drama Series" is an award? ✅


 * Premise
 * why's "24" in bold face? ✅
 * I suggest "24 is a serial drama which stars ring Kiefer Sutherland as Jack Bauer, which focuses focusing on the efforts of the fictional Counter Terrorist Unit" ✅


 * Overview
 * wikify "the Balkans" ✅
 * "end of the second season's" ✅
 * missing commas in "his new boss Secretary of Defense James Heller and"
 * good summary of the seasons. No further action required.


 * Conception
 * "Woodland Hills, Los Angeles, to" missing comma ✅
 * "The episode had a $4 million budget, with the start of filming beginning in March 2001" ✅


 * Design
 * " Furthermore, a secondary story will often takes place outside of the main plot." Past tense ✅
 * "smaller, silent, clock display also" ✅
 * "The duration of each episode without commercials is approximately 43 minutes" source? ✅ removed


 * Setting
 * wikify "South Africa" and "Sangala" ✅ Wikified South Africa, Sangala not wikified, as it doesn't exist.
 * "with these 'Domestic'" these sounds informal ✅ altered wording
 * "While CTU itself is a fictional agency, several entities with similar names or duties, like the National Counterterrorism Center, have emerged since the show's debut on television." source? Sounds like original research. ✅ ref added.
 * White House bunker shown in season 6, were also filmed here ." ✅


 * Series conclusion
 * "was issued from Fox which explained ing " ✅
 * reads well


 * Relation to other productions
 * " Like Similar to the 1997 film, Air Force One," ✅


 * Feature film
 * "Series co-creators Joel Surnow" Already ✅
 * wikify "Prague" and "Morocco" ✅


 * Cast and characters
 * reads well. No actions required


 * Reaction
 * "torture as normal,[41] effective,[42] acceptable and glamorous,[43]" move all refs to after glamourous ✅
 * "in torture in future seasons" future, or ''subsequent? ✅


 * Ratings
 * "after many fans grew became unhappy with constant interruptions." source? ✅ removed
 * "four-hour premiere increased viewership by 15% in viewers " ✅


 * Awards and nominations
 * "24 won and was nominated for several television awards including" → "24 was nominated for and won several television awards including" ✅
 * "68 Emmy nominations,[67] with 20 wins.[68]" move ref to end of sentence. ✅


 * Television
 * no actions required


 * Home media
 * "strictly emphasized" ✅
 * paragraphs 2, 3 and 4 are unsourced. Reference it, or trim it down then reference the remainng text. ✅ removed, can't find any refs for any of it.


 * Other media
 * "The success of 24 led to the extension of the series being extended " ✅
 * "as well as a number of "behind-the-scenes" books." source? There's a video, you told me that, but no books. ✅ ref added


 * References, further reading and images
 * please add alt text to images. I know it's not a GA requirement, but do it anyway, for the sake of vision-impaired users. See WP:ALT ✅
 * "Steven Keslowitz, The Simpsons, 24, and the Law: How Homer Simpson and Jack Bauer Influence Congressional Lawmaking and Judicial Reasoning, " why isn't the title italicised? ✅
 * no damaged links, no action required.

Assessment

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * I'm happy with the article. It's an informative read, and adheres to every GA criterion. Very happy with Steven Zhang's effort and resilience on the article, and I hope he can improve this article enough for the Star.  Sp33dyphil  "Ad astra" 09:27, 4 July 2011 (UTC)