Talk:24 Hour Psycho/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 04:59, 1 June 2023 (UTC)

I will review this. See Template:Did you know nominations/24 Hour Psycho. TompaDompa (talk) 04:59, 1 June 2023 (UTC)

General comments

 * The article relies rather heavily on verbatim quotes. I would try to do with fewer and/or shorter ones.

Lead

 * two side-by-side projections of 24 Hour Psycho—one running forwards and the other backwards—until both films meet in the middle for an identical, one-second shot – I would say this is WP:Close paraphrasing of the source's "two side-by-side projections of 24 Hour Psycho, with one running forward and one running backward, until both films meet in the middle for an identical, one-second shot", but it's more like an unattributed quote. This recurs in the body.

Synopsis

 * Noting both the frame rate of two per second and the frame duration of half a second is a tad redundant, I would think. I might rephrase it to put the frame duration in the same sentence as the duration of the film to make it seem less so.
 * I'm missing the point that "The video is habitually situated in the center of a room and projected on a translucent screen, encouraging reflection on both sides of the image".
 * causing reflection on both sides of the screen so that it may be viewed from either side is not quite the right way to put this. The source's "reflection" is in the figurative sense of "contemplation" or "meditation". Simply removing "causing reflection on both sides of the screen" would solve this. TompaDompa (talk) 16:02, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Fixed.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:28, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * There are some sources that discuss this work at length that I would recommend using, such as https://books.google.com/books?id=adzY36wK63UC&pg=PA144, https://books.google.com/books?id=4QnXfqfFM5oC&pg=PA59, and https://books.google.com/books?id=Vyor-o_rEr8C&pg=PA13

Background

 * The second paragraph is basically all verbatim quotes from the source or WP:Close paraphrasing thereof. I would just use a quote box.
 * This is now the third paragraph of the "Production" section. TompaDompa (talk) 16:02, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I removed the quotations and replaced them with (hopefully) appropriate summaries.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:28, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I think it just barely falls on the right side of WP:Close paraphrasing now. TompaDompa (talk) 23:03, 10 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I'm missing the information about what inspired Gordon contained in the audio file at NPR (2:35 onwards). See also https://books.google.com/books?id=i7erDwAAQBAJ&pg=PT11.
 * This, which Gordon calls an "act of curiosity", inspired him to create 24 Hour Psycho. – I'm guessing you misheard due to Gordon's Scottish accent. He says "active curiosity" (because, as he says, "idle curiosity" is a contradiction in terms). TompaDompa (talk) 16:02, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Ah, my bad!! Fixed.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:28, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I'm missing discussion of the impact of home media, which is something covered in multiple sources—including ones not cited in the article such as https://books.google.com/books?id=xYGCAgAAQBAJ&pg=PA231.

Release and reception

 * Brown also claimed that as a substantial part of Douglas' work, 24 Hour Psycho has been "shown all over the world" – I would parse this use of "as" as "it has been shown all over the world, as has a significant proportion of Douglas' other creations", but what the source says is "The renown of 24 Hour Psycho has made it a substantial part of Douglas's biography [...]", in other words saying that it is "a substantial part" rather than has similarities with a substantial part.
 * In 2010, Gordon created a second installation entitled 24 Hour Psycho Back and Forth and To and Fro – this source says 2008.
 * I'm missing the detail that the two screens showing 24 Hour Psycho Back and Forth and To and Fro are each other's reflections both in time and space.
 * I'm missing a (brief) mention of 5 Year Drive-By, which Gordon described as "something of a companion piece" to this film.
 * The point made by https://books.google.com/books?id=tXmoBAAAQBAJ&pg=PT89 contrasting Hitchcock disallowing entering showing of Psycho partway through and the necessity of doing so for 24 Hour Psycho is, I think, an interesting one that should probably be included.

Summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * See my comments above.
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * All sources are, as far as I can tell, reliable for the material they are cited for.
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * Earwig reveals no overt copyvio, but there is some WP:Close paraphrasing. After further editing, it seems to fall just barely on the right side of close paraphrasing to me.
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * See my comments above. Examining the sources cited in the article and conducting a cursory search for additional sources reveals that there is a fair amount that should be covered, but isn't. It is likely that there are even more aspects like this than the ones I've brought up above. After expansion, this issue has been resolved.
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * There are no obvious neutrality issues.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * The sole image uses a license that is acceptable per WP:CFAQ.
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Honestly, I think this was nominated prematurely. I have serious concerns about missing aspects. After much further editing, the article is up to the WP:Good article standards.
 * The sole image uses a license that is acceptable per WP:CFAQ.
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Honestly, I think this was nominated prematurely. I have serious concerns about missing aspects. After much further editing, the article is up to the WP:Good article standards.
 * Honestly, I think this was nominated prematurely. I have serious concerns about missing aspects. After much further editing, the article is up to the WP:Good article standards.

Ping. TompaDompa (talk) 19:14, 1 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I appreciate the review! I am on a trip right now but I will be back tomorrow evening to get started on this. Thanks,  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 02:52, 3 June 2023 (UTC)
 * It was definitely a premature nomination—so I thank you very much for your patience and taking the time to give me those sources. I believe I have addressed all of your concerns except for "24 Hour Psycho Back and Forth and To and Fro are each other's reflections both in time and space"; which source says this?  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 01:19, 7 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Gagosian Quarterly: two identical screens installed side by side, with Douglas's film playing in full on each: forward on one, backward on the other, with one flipped left to right such that—at exactly twelve hours in—they present the same images, mirrored, in a kind of exquisite, time-limited film version of a Rorschach inkblot test. TompaDompa (talk) 08:50, 7 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Okay, is everything alright now?  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 22:59, 7 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Not quite, but we're definitely getting there. I've updated some of my comments above and added strikethrough markup to resolved issues. I will have to take a look at the brand-new "Themes and analysis" section and survey the sources more closely to make sure its alright and doesn't omit any major aspects. TompaDompa (talk) 16:02, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Awesome, thanks.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:28, 9 June 2023 (UTC)
 * There we go, the article passes. Great job! TompaDompa (talk) 23:03, 10 June 2023 (UTC)