Talk:26 Broadway/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠  09:37, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have addressed all your comments above. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * that is inspired was inspired.
 * as well as above the 18th and 22nd Shorten "as well as" to "and".
 * it consists of a recessed double-height arch, with elaborately carved spandrels at the top of the arch. Consider "at its top".
 * these doorways are located within doorways topped by pediments and clocks. Replace the first "doorways" with something else.
 * ✅ That was an error. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Features": Atlas Obscura, which uses user-generated material, is not a reliable source.
 * I thought so. This is a direct quote, but anyway. epicgenius (talk) 15:20, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Move the image in "Initial structure" to the right.
 * "Twenty-six Broadway was once to oil what 1600 Pennsylvania Avenue [the White House] is to politics." Just use the White Houses's address to link the White House here.
 * every cent any of [Standard Oil's subsidiaries] made found its way to 26 Broadway" reads weird
 * myself after finishing the review, after after I had a staircase wit moment and remembered this, by removing "any" – ♠Vami _IV†♠  11:31, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * After World War I, Walter C. Teagle Who?
 * (died 1928) Delete.
 * ✅ I thought it was relevant to the narrative, but apparently not. epicgenius (talk)
 * Would be if his death effected the lease. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  16:07, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , it did not. epicgenius (talk) 16:41, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The content of "Tenats#Former" should be carefully inserted into "History".
 * A third, the Urban Assembly School of Business for Young Women, is a high school serving grades 9-12. When did this open?
 * ✅ 2005.
 * Starting in 2008, the PS 234 elementary school was supposed to have used [...] subsequently deemed "not appropriate for kindergartners" This would make this school not a current tenant. Shorten and send this sentence and its citation into "History"
 * [67]:540 This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
 * , it did not. epicgenius (talk) 16:41, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The content of "Tenats#Former" should be carefully inserted into "History".
 * A third, the Urban Assembly School of Business for Young Women, is a high school serving grades 9-12. When did this open?
 * ✅ 2005.
 * Starting in 2008, the PS 234 elementary school was supposed to have used [...] subsequently deemed "not appropriate for kindergartners" This would make this school not a current tenant. Shorten and send this sentence and its citation into "History"
 * [67]:540 This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
 * [67]:540 This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).
 * [67]:540 This is the only instance of this form of citation in the article. The [67] part also already has the page number(s).