Talk:9th millennium BC/GA3

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)

Dunkleosteus77

 * "all dates mentioned here are estimates mostly based on geological and anthropological analysis" that's typically how we date things even when using radiometric dating  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Good point. Have added RD.


 * "especially in the region known as the Fertile Crescent" why not simply "especially in the Fertile Crescent"?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Agreed. Done.


 * "with evidence of agriculture in Iran, the Levant, Mesopotamia and Syria" here you wanna specify modern day Iran and Syria (they weren't called those 10,000 years ago)  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I've reworded because the Levant covers a much wider area than was implied.


 * "The starting point for the Greenlandian is the Global Boundary Stratotype Section and Point (GSSP) sample from the North Greenland Ice Core Project" not necessary here. The GSSP is just the baseline used to define a stratigraphic age/epoch/period/era/etc., much like how the International Prototype of the Kilogram used to define the kilogram  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, that was a bit too much detail as there is a link to Greenlandian. Have removed the GSSP/NGICP.


 * What does p.a. stand for?
 * per annum.


 * It would be good to put down how they came about those population estimates. If I remember right, they assumed the population density of a city then was the same as the population density of a typical city in the same region today, so they multiplied that by the estimated total size of the city to get some debatably over/underestimated value  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I think, as with Greenlandian above, that would be going into too much detail. There is a link to World population estimates and this goes some way towards explaining the concept and method.


 * "making it the earliest known site of human settlement in Scotland" this is outdated  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, there is an earlier one somewhere. I remember reading about it. Have removed the earliest known clause and substituted c. 8500 BC as the estimated date for Cramond.


 * wasn't agriculture introduced to India 10,000 years ago?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I think it was later, no earlier than the 8th millennium, but I'm by no means sure. Our article on Prehistoric India says 7000 BC but that doesn't rule out an earlier start. If you have a source for the 9th millennium, do please include it in the article.


 * why is it important than emmer had twice as many chromosomes?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Not important, just something mentioned in the source. The important point is its ease of scattering. I've taken out the chromosome piece.


 * "The Natufians took full advantage of these genetic improvements and learned how to harvest the new wheat, grind it into flour and make bread. The early bread was unleavened, with the dough allowed to dry on hot stones." how do we know this?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * They can't have known there had been genetic improvements so I've simplified the sentence to the basic facts. The whole of this paragraph is sourced to Bronowski in 1973. I'd be happy to use more recent sources if they can be found but I think his views on these developments still hold good.


 * "Ganj Dareh, in Iranian Kurdistan, has been cited as the earliest settlement to domesticate livestock, especially goats" when did this happen? Why especially goats?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * There's a particular emphasis on goat remains by Melinda Zeder, one of the principal archaeologists at Ganj Derah, in the source. Ganj Derah dates from c.8500 BC but it seems to have been towards 8000 BC for the goats. I've reworded the sentence but do please alter this wording if you wish.


 * You seem to really gloss over the Americas and skip Africa and Australia entirely. You don't mention the Clovis people, the transition to the Folsom, or the Fell and Los Toldos cultures which inhabited the tip of South America during this millenium, or the Chan Hol woman from the Yucutan. You don't mention the isolation of Tasmania or the invention of the boomerang in Australia. You mention that pottery was invented in China 18,000 years ago but you skip that it was in use in the Sahara and Sahel by the 10th millenium. Also, the earliest (contested, I think) massacres date to around this time  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:52, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I think the Clovis culture was earlier and would be out of scope here. I don't know much about the Folsom tradition but I notice the article includes a statement that the Folsom Complex dates to between 9000 BC and 8000 BC and is thought to have derived from the earlier Clovis culture. That would be fine for this article but there is no source. I've tagged the other article accordingly.
 * Sorry, I must go for now. Will come back to you on Chan Hol as I know of it but need to read about it again. I think the boomerang was much, much earlier than this but will check. Tasmania may have been 10th millennium – I remember a Tasmanian I knew telling me it separated at the end of the last ice age so I'll need to check this too.
 * The Clovis culture appears to have ended in the 9th millennium, Tasmania was isolated at the end of the last ice age so the 9th millennium is within that range (and the Tasmania article also uses the date 10,000 years ago), boomerangs were invented earlier in Poland but were invented by the Australians 10,000 years ago  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 12:59, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Thank you,, for starting the review. I'm rather short of time today but I've given answers to most of the points raised above. I should have more time tomorrow. By the way, you don't need to sign each point individually. It's usual to add a summary at the end of the list and just sign that. No Great Shaker (talk) 11:54, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Amendments
Hello again,. I've made a few amendments to this article as well as enhancing 10th millennium BC with some new information. A few comments about my findings:


 * Encyclopaedia Britannica gives us a source for the Folsom complex so I've added that to the article now. I found a piece in Cueva Fell about the Fell's Tradition with a good source to confirm the dating. I've heard of a Los Toldos tradition but can't find a source that confirms its dating (plenty about Eva Peron, of course), so I'll need your help with that – do you have a book or journal source we could use?
 * if you can read Portuguese  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 19:53, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * The abstract there doesn't mention any timeframe so it isn't usable, unless you are meaning one of the many links off that page. Do you have another source? No Great Shaker (talk) 21:34, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * The dates aren't in the abstract, you'll need to actually read it. The title literally translates to "New dates for Los Toldos rock art"  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:19, 23 July 2020 (UTC)
 * The language is Spanish and "nuevos datos" translates as new data, not new dates. New dates is "nuevas fechas". Also, the source is a subscription site so I can't read it apart from the abstract. However, it's certainly a reputable journal so I'll take it on your approval and use it to include a mention of Los Toldos. Thanks.


 * I've mentioned the Ounjougou finds as an example of independent innovation. There isn't much to be said about pottery in this millennium apart from reference to Kathleen Kenyon's classification, so the section is really just an overview of where pottery was at, with the intention of a continued thread through the various millennia articles. I haven't found any sources for pottery finds explicitly dated to this millennium but, if there are any out there, they can be added later.


 * It seems that Tasmania is held to have completed its separation from Australia by the end of the Last Glacial Period (c.9700 BC). Bass Strait was a plain gradually inundated over several centuries – for example, see Separation of Tasmania at the Australian National Museum site, based on research by Iain Davidson and David Roberts. I've actually added this to 10th millennium BC as new information.


 * I'm inclined to think the boomerang is too tenuous for inclusion. According to the NMA, the device is believed to have been used by Aboriginals around 20,000 years ago, although the oldest ones actually found (not invented) are from perhaps 8000 BC. I'll let you decide on whether to include that but personally I think 8th millennium BC would be the more appropriate venue. The NMA page is this one.


 * I ran a search on early massacres and found the Smithsonian article about Nataruk. Quite an eye-opener. Probably a battle between two tribes who fell out over hunting in the same place.

Anyway, do take a look and see what you think. I should have more availability for the next couple of days and happy to answer further queries. Thanks again. No Great Shaker (talk) 06:01, 22 July 2020 (UTC)