Talk:A-flat clarinet/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Schminnte (talk · contribs) 08:21, 18 December 2023 (UTC)

Hello @ Jonathanischoice, you know the drill by now so I'll skip the boring bits. I'll start working on this review soon, at least within the week. As a clarinettist, I'm excited to get started and spotcheck with my own copies! All the best, Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 08:21, 18 December 2023 (UTC)
 * @Jonathanischoice, I think I have finished with review comments. I will now place the article on the standard hold period to give you time to address them. All the best, Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 21:26, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
 * - Hi, I'm half-way through, but it's now Christmas in my part of the world (Merry Christmas!) so I might not be able to get to this for another few days. Cheers, Jon (talk) 21:40, 24 December 2023 (UTC)
 * @Jonathanischoice: Still a few hours here! I'm more than happy to extend the hold for a while, say until New Year's Day? Would that work for you? Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 22:13, 24 December 2023 (UTC)
 * That would be good - I've just got back to it today. Cheers — Jon (talk) 10:10, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
 * nearly but not quite finished, can you let me know what you think so far? Cheers — Jon (talk) 00:19, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
 * @Jonathanischoice, great progress. Just a few more points. Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 02:07, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
 * side note... I'm trying to get hold of this resource (Dictionary for the Modern Clarinetist) which could be a good RS for remaining points, but I might not get to it in time; apparently the full text is available through ProQuest but my library doesn't get to it, and I won't be able to interloan the physical book until after 8 January. Are you able to get it? — Jon (talk) 08:55, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
 * It appears to be available on archive.org with a free membership. Can you get it through that? <b style="font-family:Trebuchet MS; color:#0645AD">Schminnte</b> &#91;<i style="color:#0645AD">talk to me</i>&#93; 09:39, 29 December 2023 (UTC)
 * happy new year :) thanks for finding that, I didn't think to look on IA. I've attempted to address the remaining points, where possible, and marked them with a yellow (!) icon for convenience. Zero luck with images or sound samples so far, alas. Jon (talk) 20:32, 31 December 2023 (UTC)
 * Happy new year Jon. Seeing as all other points are resolved and User:Mscuthbert has been inactive for two weeks, I'm going to pass this review. Other discussions about new images and sounds can be discussed on the talk page: for now I am aware that the review has been open for two weeks and content that locating the best quality media has been attempted. Congratulations on another GA! All the best, <b style="font-family:Trebuchet MS; color:#0645AD">Schminnte</b> &#91;<i style="color:#0645AD">talk to me</i>&#93; 00:35, 1 January 2024 (UTC)

Comments

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * §Lede:
 * Turn the two links to clarinet and clarinet family into a single link to clarinet family over both words - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * common B♭ clarinet, and pitched a minor seventh higher: remove comma since we are still discussing the Bb - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * Around the beginning of the 19th century several: comma needed after century for clarity - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * More generally I would like to see the lede expanded to include more points from §Construction and §Repertoire - S
 * Have had an initial go, thoughts? — Jon (talk)
 * Good start, maybe mention some of the makers and more famous composers (Verdi, Bartók)? - S
 * Including infobox things here:
 * Arguably "Wind Woodwind" is not necessary since woodwind is linked above. I think you can remove these but keep "single-reed" - S
 * have indicated a classification heirarchy, but this is not done on other instrument pages, so maybe you're right? — Jon (talk)
 * I think the arrows work quite well as a compromise, not entirely sure on the MOS for this - S
 * Clarinet might not be needed to be linked in "related instruments" since clarinet family is linked below. If it is kept, I would like a link to Bb clarinet or Bb clarinet specifically - S
 * Done (fixed other things here too) — Jon (talk)
 * §History:
 * Could we have links to the musicologists mentioned in the first sentence? - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * "Small" should be in italics, not quotes per MOS:WAW - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * Of the three highest and smallest "octave" clarinets [...] only 28 centimetres (11 in) long: I think a split is called for after "bands" - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * Much better, thanks - S
 * §Construction:
 * Wiki-link mouthpiece and bell - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * larger clarinets, or even: this last comma seems a bit too much separation - S
 * Have reworded sentence for hopefully better clarity. — Jon (talk)
 * §Repertoire:
 * Do we need to know that go featured other tangentially related instruments? - S
 * Maybe not, but it's kind of fun... Vérifications also has piccolo, musette and Casio SK-1 — Jon (talk)
 * I think it's fine on reflection - S
 * I think the contemporary works list is unnecessary since its already in prose form - S
 * Me too, fixed, moved Vérifications into prose — Jon (talk)
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * No copyvio found in internet sources with Earwig's - S
 * Source spot checks for copyvio and text-source integrity (copyvio only checked when mentioned):
 * Ref 2 (Shackleton 2001): pass for verifiability. Maybe consider mentioning that Shackleton also calls these octave clarinets - S
 * He clarifies later that Tschaikov (p43) clarifies that "octave" clarinets refer to the three highest in A B♭ and C, an octave above the more common regular-sized (soprano) clarinets in those keys.
 * Ref 3 (Lawson 1995): pass for verifiability - S
 * Ref 4 (Baines 1977): pass for verifiability - S
 * Ref 5a&b (Rice 2017): both passes for verifiability - S
 * Ref 6 (Tschaikov 1995): pass for verifiability, perhaps also mention he calls them "little" at some points - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * Ref 9 (Rice 2017): pass for verifiability and copyvio - S
 * Ref 10 (Forsyth 1914): pass for verifiability - S
 * Ref 11 (Tschaikov 1995): pass for verifiability and copyvio, though is there any reason not to use the given spelling of picksüsses Hölzl (or picksüßes Hölzl as is given in other sources)? - S
 * Fixed, as in the cited ref — Jon (talk)
 * Ref 14a&b (Baines 1977): a is a fail for verifiability but a pass for copyvio, page doesn't mention any time-frames or countries with regards to military bands. b is also a fail for verifiability for aforementioned reasons and as it doesn't mention doubling the piccolo flute line, only being able to play into piccolo range - S
 * That's because for 14a I was using the wrong ref (now 11b, Tschaikov 1995 p.53), and for now I can't remember where I read that it largely copies the piccolo line in band parts, but I will find it and update the other ref (for now, ref 15) — Jon (talk)
 * I've given up on the piccolo factoid; I can't recall where I read it at the time, and now can't find it. — Jon (talk)
 * Ref 16 (Tschaikov 1995): pass for verifiability and copyvio - S
 * Ref 18 (Tschaikov 1995): pass for verifiability and copyvio - S
 * Can we have author-links for Nicholas Shackleton, Colin Lawson, Cecil Forsyth and Anthony Baines? - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * "Hans-Joachim Hespos website", "website" is not needed - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * What makes The Clarinet BBoard a reliable source? - S
 * It really isn't, but I have been hoping to find this in a more reliable place, without luck so far. Can always remove/revise the claim I suppose. — Jon (talk)
 * Unless a better source can be found, I think the statement should be removed - S
 * Rephrased, cites a Leblanc museum specimen built 1983 — Jon (talk)
 * YouTube and Discogs are unreliable and shouldn't be used to support that text - S
 * Moved to §External links — Jon (talk)
 * The first paragraph of §Construction and the last of §Repertoire need citations - S
 * Reworked the last repertoire paragraph, found a choir history article and Cailliet Grove entry. There's literally nothing written about the construction of A♭ clarinets, but at least the one-piece body segment is self-evident from photos in manufacturer catalogs/websites, and I'm thinking it's bordering on WP:SKYBLUE? Have used a web-ref to an example museum item which states the obvious.
 * When the publisher is Cambridge University Press, the location isn't needed - S
 * Fixed — Jon (talk)
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Although short, the article holds up when compared to other literature (Cambridge Companion, Grove, etc.) - S
 * I was hesitant on the inclusion of other piccolo here, but on reflection I think this is fine. It makes sense to address them as well in this article - S
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Not sure how you could be biased towards a clarinet, but the articles seems neutral. Bias is not present when discussing makers - S
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Just a question here, is the content dispute detailed at talk page section "Military bands and composers in Italy" completely over? A simple yes/no is fine - S
 * I'm not certain; it's entirely possible I'm misunderstanding something, and I'd be interested what Mscuthbert thinks about things. — Jon (talk)
 * Seeing as the user is inactive and it was quite a while ago, I'm AGFing this criterion and passing it - S
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Images tagged properly with CC licenses - S
 * Is there any way to get a non-free sound file here, or an external link to an appropriate site? - S
 * would you be interested in recording something for the article? Otherwise I haven't been able to find anything on Commons or elsewhere that is compatibly-licensed (public domain, CC, etc.) — Jon (talk)
 * Can a better picture of reeds be found than File:B-flat e-flat a-flat reeds.jpg, which looks quite low quality? - S
 * I don't think it's that bad, but could you take another photo of your reeds? I'm assuming Schminnte means the reflection/glare. — Jon (talk)
 * Per MOS:CAPLENGTH, a caption is not needed for this infobox photo - S
 * Done — Jon (talk)
 * Caption 3: Note the greater difference in size between A♭ and E♭ than between E♭ and B♭: why should we note this? It isn't mentioned in text and seems unnecessary to say. - S
 * Fair enough. — Jon (talk)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: