Talk:ABA Games/GA1

GA Review
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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * The big thing I noticed was punctuation/misplaced commas. There were still a few comma splices and probably some places where emdashes would make more sense or at least to avoid overloading a particular sentence with commas. Some other things I found while copyediting the Games section (and corrected myself, as shown here; listing them for future reference and as an aid in future copyediting):
 * the player can control the speed at which the protagonist proceeds through the level. → I thought it sounded better to indicate that the player is proceeding through the level.
 * The faster the player moves through a level, the more points the game will yield. → Keeping it simple, changed to the more points they [players] will score.
 * dependant → dependent
 * ...by means of both hands on the keyboard. → Again, for simplicity, changed to ...using both hands...
 * Blast Works was met with critical acclaim for its innovative and entertaining gameplay, and has been described by critics variously as an upgraded version or remake... → The first thing I changed was the voice of the sentence from the passive to the active. The second is that the comma listed above is a splice because it is not separating two independent clauses (but rather one independent and one dependent) – a common mistake made by many (even veteran) editors.
 * It's iPhone and iPod, respectively; the first letter after the "i" always capitalized per Apple's naming convention.
 * Hopefully, I caught everything. MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Hopefully, I caught everything. MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)


 * B. MoS compliance:
 * Looks very good, now. MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Looks very good, now. MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)


 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * Corrected per above. MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Everything looks good and now meets all criteria. Good job, ABA Games is now a Good Article! MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Everything looks good and now meets all criteria. Good job, ABA Games is now a Good Article! MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Everything looks good and now meets all criteria. Good job, ABA Games is now a Good Article! MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good and now meets all criteria. Good job, ABA Games is now a Good Article! MuZemike 17:01, 3 April 2009 (UTC)