Talk:A Ball for Daisy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 08:44, 18 June 2019 (UTC)

I have copy edited. Could you check and flag up any issues? Thanks.
 * Could you add alt text for the image?


 * "Plot" is unsourced.
 * Plot sections which don't include quotes are generally unsourced. Plot sections in general operate in a weird space. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
 * I wasn't aware of that convention. I would have expected plots to be sourced to the work in question, but ok.


 * Reference 11 has a stray upright.


 * "after seeing how upset his son lost a ball thanks to a dog" This phrase doesn't really make sense to me.
 * It sure didn't. Fixed. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)


 * "Raschka had never dreamed of winning the Caldecott was on his way to his studio to work when the committee called to tell him of his win." This seems a little confused. Possibly the sentence is trying to say too much and could be broken into two?
 * It could byut I think it works with a conjunction? Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
 * How about 'Raschka had never dreamed that he might win the Caldecott, and was on his way to his studio when the committee called to tell him of his win.' or something similar?
 * I had already done the and but also added the comma. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 12:05, 18 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Apologies, I should have checked.

Gog the Mild (talk) 08:44, 18 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your copyedit. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 11:55, 18 June 2019 (UTC)


 * Another fine little article. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:13, 18 June 2019 (UTC)