Talk:A Free Ride/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 13:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)

I will take this review. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)

Comments

 * 1b
 * The lede should better reflect the article, including the 1923 estimate and that the film has given rise to other works. Perhaps have two paragraphs for the lede, considering the length of the article.
 * Expanded the lede to include all these points, made a two-paragraph lede. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  14:49, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * 2a
 * The pile up of references for "Most sources put the production year of this film at 1915 and consider A Free Ride to be the earliest surviving American hardcore pornographic film." looks awkward. Any way it could be merged into one reference, maybe through a footnote?
 * Also, publisher locations?
 * I have used Template:Sfnm, but some technical problem occurred. See this. The Thompson reference is not showing the year. Someone knowledgeable about this technical issue should fix it. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  14:49, 10 March 2012 (UTC)
 * The problem is fixed. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  16:22, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * 3a
 * I think a bit about the Oppenheim film should be added, at the very least the title and how it could not have any actors. (Is it worth an article?)
 * Added. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  14:49, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * 3b
 * I'm not sure the anecdote about de Renzy is entirely relevant.
 * Nuked. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  14:49, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * 6b
 * I think a screenshot would be best for the infobox (perhaps the title card), with the film further down and in a larger resolution. That's not a criteria, naturally. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:43, 10 March 2012 (UTC)
 * But I have no idea how to take a sceenshot from the video. -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  13:45, 10 March 2012 (UTC)
 * It's just a side comment, not a must. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:07, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Spotchecks on Cavendish and Thompson check out, as does paraphrasing. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:07, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Hold for the relatively minor fixes above. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * That does it, methinks. Congrats! Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:15, 10 March 2012 (UTC)


 * Thank you for reviewing! -- Supernova Explosion   Talk  16:30, 10 March 2012 (UTC)