Talk:A Story About My Uncle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 01:41, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

Opening Kingsif (talk) 01:41, 2 February 2020 (UTC)

Style
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 * Lead fair length for article
 * The lead sentence The game was "re-developed professionally" after the collaboration with Coffee Stain Studios. either needs a citation for the quotation or, preferably, to rephrase. If it's not an actual quotation, remove the marks.
 * The "brilliant scientist" needs a citation - refs can come at the end of a block of sentences if it's just information being sourced, but all quotes must be directly supported by their source
 * Do "waste disposal system" and "waste disposal dimension" really warrant quotation marks?
 * The Gameplay section has a lot about the introduction to the world cutscene, which isn't really the gameplay.
 * In my ce of the section, I've added a 'who?' tag to an instance of "he" - it's not clear if this is the narrator or the uncle.
 * Needs some inline attribution for the "playing with gravity" quotation - i.e. write in the sentence who said that and why they're important in terms of the game's dev
 * The article have different things in AmEng and BritEng, could it be standardised to one or the other - I'd recommend BritEng for proximity and similarity to Sweden.
 * I'll add a note here to say that some of the corrections to quotations in the reception look small but the nature of the mistake suggests a major gap in the grasp of English of someone making such errors - cutting them off halfway, leaving out parts of a noun phrase so it's nonsense, misinterpreting a critic statement, leaving out the actual criticism in the quote...
 * Needs attention - I've done a ce, but there are questions and suggestions above for things

Coverage
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 * Maybe more on gameplay - what does the player have to do (blow up rocks?) and what is the game's aim (rescue the uncle?) - what are the controls, do they differ on different consoles, etc.
 * One source says it's a puzzle platformer, does this deserve inclusion?
 * this says the game is not a puzzle platformer.  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Needs attention

Illustration

 * Copyright gameplay image of first person perspective may not be fair use: it doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of first person perspective, a common element


 * Reception box seems unnecessary with only one rated review


 * Same with the accolades table, with only one nomination


 * Infobox and cover image good
 * Needs attention

Neutrality

 * Fine
 * Pass

Stability

 * Clean history and talk
 * Pass

Verifiability

 * Sources look good
 * In-line citations good except those needed at quotations, mentioned above
 * Pass

Copyright
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 * Some close paraphrasing outside of quotations from here/ here and here/ here; also, some things directly quoted from these sources can easily be said in your own words, and may read better if done so (look at the right column for the things in the article that have been flagged - small phrases and the game title are fine - and see how they can be rewritten)
 * Otherwise, check seems fine
 * Question of copyright gameplay image above
 * Needs attention


 * on hold Kingsif (talk) 02:37, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * , done.  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
 * With one last copyedit, fair. Symbol support vote.svg Kingsif (talk) 13:18, 2 February 2020 (UTC)