Talk:A Toast to Men/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:31, 10 June 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * a song from American singer → I think "by" sounds better here
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * you should say here, as well as in the "Background" section that it fatured vocals from Lady Mary
 * Added. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Link "critics" to music journalism
 * Added. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

 * flawless ;)
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Background and composition

 * behind the lyrics, she said → say "confessed" here to avoid word repetition
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * and twelve seconds → 12 is above 10, so don't spell it out
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Release and promotion

 * was released as a digital download → replace "as a" with "for"
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * The song was promoted → state "the track" here to avoid repeition
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * sometime in the mid-2000s → this sounds very weird; if you don't have the exact date, I suggest removing this
 * Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Link "radioplay" to airplay
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * of IGN, the record was → "record" is generally only used for albums, so state "recording" here
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * and "add[ed[ fuel → syntax error
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * You can link the first paragraph with the second one if you like
 * I would prefer to keep it separate as the first paragraph is covering the critical reception while the second one is covering commercial performance. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Formats and track listings

 * You can remove "Formats and" to keep the section name simple
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * EP → Digital EP
 * If you look at the Amazon.com reference, then you will see that there was a CD single for the EP so "Digital EP" would not be an accurate title. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * flawless ;)
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Charts

 * I fixed the table here
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Release history

 * Fixed things here as well
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Unlink formats please
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 47.9%; maybe you can reword some things?
 * Revised. Thank you for pointing this out. Hopefully this fixes it. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Links

 * No problems here!
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)

Outcome
Putting this for 7 days. Great job with the article; Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:34, 10 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I will make the corrections on Monday if that is okay with you as I have a busy weekend. Aoba47 (talk) 15:57, 10 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. I believe that I have covered all of the points raised above. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do to improve the article. Thank you again. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Passing this; congrats!! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:20, 12 June 2017 (UTC)