Talk:A Transfer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * In the infobox, use "plainlist" instead of "  " per the rules on the template.✅
 * Is the "|story=Gainax" parameter necessary?
 * A Transfer" "A Transfer"✅
 * What does "7.1% rating" mean?
 * It means that 7.1% of Japan's televisions were tuned to Tokyo TV during the run. I took it for granted, given the percentage.

Plot

 * The plot is 417 words, while it should be under 400 per WP:TVPLOT.✅
 * Remove the comma after "poorly for Nerv".
 * Removed.

Production

 * What exactly is "a mount" within the context of the show?
 * Specified.

Cultural references and themes

 * The caption on the image should describe its significance within the article.
 * Also improve the non-free use rationales of the images (see MOS:TVIMAGE for help).
 * Hope it helps.


 * "awkward communication. ... Evangelion" "awkward communication [...] Evangelion"
 * Fixed.


 * "the sixties inspire" "the 1960s inspired"✅
 * Wikipedia doesn't normally use phrases like "he said" so try rewording the sentence.✅
 * References should be included at the end of each quote, so recite certain sources.✅
 * "A transfer" "A Transfer"✅

Reception

 * Again, explain what "7.1% rating" means and/or refers to.
 * The second reference after "home video releases" is missing parts of its title.✅
 * "as it shows" "as it showed"✅

Notes and references

 * Change the "Notes" header to "References", add a subsection titled "Citations" and make the original "References" section into a "Bibliography" subsection (example).✅
 * Archive all archivable sources (either manually or with this tool).✅
 * Optional, but it helps readers if you link websites within the "|website=" parameter.✅


 * Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:49, 14 March 2021 (UTC)