Talk:A Very Trainor Christmas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:44, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

I will get on with this starting from today! --K. Peake 07:44, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The ref is not needed in the infobox when that single is already sourced in the body
 * "released the album on" → "released it on"
 * "Trainor involved her family members in its creation, co-writing its songs with" → "Meghan Trainor involved her family members in the creation, co-writing songs with" to be less wordy and per MOS:SAMESURNAME
 * ❌ I find the switch to full names mid-article very jarring. Removing the surname's repetition for Gary solves the problem.


 * "and her father, Gary Trainor. It includes" → "and her father, Gary. The album includes"
 * "The album was supported by" → "It was supported by"
 * Wikilink music videos
 * "towards her charisma" → "towards Trainor's charisma"

Background

 * Img looks good!
 * The term "forayed" is not appropriate for Wiki; use something more formal
 * ❌ Cambridge defines foray as "a short visit, especially with a known purpose" so its usage here makes sense and I actually can't think of a better alternative.


 * "to complete the album:" → "to complete her Christmas album:" to be specific
 * Wikilink music videos
 * "to feel like "a pop Christmas"," → "to feel like "a POP Christmas"," per the source
 * ❌ per MOS:ALLCAPS as pop is not an acronym or initialism.


 * "she officially announced" → "Trainor officially announced"

Composition

 * "Jenna & Marcus Toney" this is two people so shouldn't it have the word "and" unless they operate as a duo?
 * I checked Apple Music and they treat this as a band-type stage name


 * "Trainor stated that she" → "Meghan Trainor stated that she"
 * ❌ per above.


 * [14] should be re-invoked at the end of the Earth, Wind & Fire sentence per that using direct quotes
 * "song "Christmas Coupon" and covers" → "song "Christmas Coupon", and covers"
 * "vocals on which she insists" → "vocals and insists"
 * "current-day pop" according to" → "current-day pop", according to"

Release and promotion

 * Remove "the song" introduction to "My Kind of Present" since you have already done this
 * Mention the single release was in 2020
 * "and a huge red bow." → "and a large red bow."
 * Pipe Christmas in Rockefeller Center to Rockefeller Center Christmas Tree
 * "from her husband, Daryl Sabara, and" → "from her husband Daryl Sabara and"
 * ❌ Trainor only has one husband, so his name is not necessary to identify which husband is being talked about.


 * Disney Parks Christmas Day Parade should be italicised

Critical reception

 * Merge with the below section and retitle to Reception
 * "Critical commentary for the album was" → "Critical commentary for A Very Trainor Christmas was"
 * "the most ebullient but" → "the most ebullient, but"
 * "and believed it had the potential" → "and believed in the potential"
 * I have retained the "it", otherwise it sounds like the critic believes in his own potential to become a go-to Christmas soundtrack.


 * "He opined it" → "He opined the album"
 * "cheerful and charismatic and" → "cheerful and charismatic, and"
 * "with integrity and do not change" → "with integrity that does not change"
 * "and its momentum is" → "and the momentum is"

Commercial performance

 * Make this the third para of the above section
 * "It entered at" → "The album entered at"

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Label → Label(s)
 * The digital download releases are not actually sourced as various regions

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; proud I got this done within one day! --K. Peake 19:34, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for another great (and swift!) review, Kyle Peake! Always a pleasure working with you. All done except for some of the points I disagreed with.--NØ 21:20, 7 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The only problem remaining is the commas for her husband, as this implies it is a separate person from the man listed. --K. Peake 19:20, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I can see how it might appear so but it's actually not the case. From The New York Times, "" In this case, "Trainor's husband" can only describe Sabara.--NØ 19:23, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I totally understand your explanation and thanks for it! --K. Peake 19:27, 8 August 2023 (UTC)