Talk:Aaron Swartz/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lizzy150 (talk · contribs) 10:54, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reading and reviewing this article shortly. Lizzy (talk 10:54, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Assuming the nominator or other editors see this.. some comments below. These are glaring issues which should be addressed.

Thanks, Just Lizzy(talk) 18:28, 22 December 2019 (UTC)
 * The lead section needs 3 or 4 succinct paragraphs summarising the biography.
 * Various sentences with lots of citations, eg. [119][120][121][122]. This makes reading and editing tricky. Please can these be reviewed and edited as appropriate.
 * "Death, funeral, and memorial gatherings" could be called "Death and memorials". This section should be condensed into one without the sub-headings.
 * "Response" section - consider reducing the number of sub-headings. I don't think one word headings provide enough context.
 * Various issues in prose - please use consistent paragraphs. Avoid one line/two lines, and some are too big (eg. Open Access section)
 * "Media" section - I think this section contains too much detail and deviates off-topic. How relevant is it? Can we reduce it?

Nominator hasn't been online since August and no changes to the article have been made. Closing this for now. Should be renominated when ready. Just Lizzy(talk) 16:00, 5 January 2020 (UTC)