Talk:Abebe Bikila/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HaEr48 (talk · contribs) 06:43, 21 June 2017 (UTC)

Will take this review. Interesting article. HaEr48 (talk) 06:44, 21 June 2017 (UTC) First round of review.
 * Image caption “Receiving the Star of Ethiopia”: is it the emperor giving the star? If so, I think his identity is notable enough to be stated in caption
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “Newsreel of the 1964 Olympics”: mention the agency that produced the newsreel, the fact that it’s about Men’s marathon (vs the Olympics in general), and the Abebe’s victory in it in the caption.
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “Abebe again did calisthenics”: describe what calisthenics is, I think many general readers do not know this word.
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “Abebe and Mamo Wolde ran a ceremonial half-marathon”: brief description of Mamo Wolde would be useful
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * Usually country name for the place of birth/death in the infobox uses the country at the time of birth/death. In this case, I think Ethiopian Empire is more appropriate than Ethiopia which links to the modern-day country
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “the German government refused to accept payment for their services”: Who does “they” refer to? The German government? (shouldn’t it be “it”?) What services does the government provide?
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 * Explain what quadriplegic and paraplegia mean at the first mention of those words
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 * “February 2015 lawsuit filed in.. ”: who were the plaintiffs?
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 * “Abebe had begun to limp,” has a citation needed tag  - please resolve.
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * Lead says he enlisted as non-commissioned officer, but how come in 1964 he was “promoted” to corporal, which is lower than NCO?
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * Also, the NCO rank isn’t sourced in lead, and not supported by the article body.
 * ✅ This was caused by my misunderstanding that a private is considered an NCO. He joined as common soldier and was promoted to corporal which is the lowest NCO rank in Ethiopian military. Nonetheless, I have removed any mention of NCO as it is a modern concept in Ethiopian military. &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * The article focuses on Abebe’s career - which is well because he has a brilliant one - but do we know more about his life outside of athletics? E.g. personal life, kids, hobbies, education, political or religious views?
 * I added more info about his kids (the plaintiffs in Vibram case). Abebe was mostly uneducated (the shepherd persona is well-found). There is little information on his political and religious views. He in fact seems to have avoided being roped into the coup d'état largely because of his disinterest in politics. I am reminded of Forest Gump. &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “Refuting the mythical aspects of his life (especially the circumstances surrounding his accident)”: this is the first time we hear about mythical aspects - can you elaborate?
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)


 * “According to Tim Lewis”: describe who Lewis is?
 * ✅ &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk)

Overall an interesting article, well-sourced. copyvio and OR unlikely. Some comments above about the prose, captions and scope. HaEr48 (talk) 04:13, 22 June 2017 (UTC)


 * I believe I have address a vast majority of the issues you have raised. I agree his personal life needs work before reaching FA level. There are rumors of mistresses and perhaps two other children (no RS to corroborate, the rest of the family does not recognize their claim). I also believe the oldest and perhaps now deceased legitimate child not named in this article, was actually named Dawit (David). But I cannot comfortably add this without some OR and SYNTH. &mdash;አቤል ዳዊት?(Janweh64) (talk) 07:08, 29 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your updates, . I've checked them and I agree that they address my concerns. I'm happy to pass this nomination. Good work on this interesting biography. HaEr48 (talk) 01:54, 1 July 2017 (UTC)