Talk:Abel Briones Ruiz/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 20:25, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
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 * Thank you for the thorough review, . I believe I have addressed your points below. Cheers, MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 20:27, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * He owns several hotels and a Matamoros-based gas company, Briones Ruiz owns.


 * According to the Public Registry of Property and Commerce (RPPC), Briones Ruiz registered Combustibles Briones, S.A. de C.V. as a commercial entity in 2009. He has listed himself as a commercial business owner. Condense.


 * but were only licensed short-term by Pemex to operate. Reword.


 * U.S. authorities were also seeking to forfeiture Nieto González's properties. Consider: U.S. authorities were also seeking forfeiture of Nieto González's properties.


 * the Internal Revenue Service (IRS), the Drug Enforcement Administration (DEA), the Customs and Border Protection (CBP), Texas Department of Public Safety, Cameron County District Attorney's Office, the Cameron County Sheriff's Office, the Willacy County Sheriff's Office, and the Texas police departments of San Benito, Harlingen, Port Isabel, and Brownsville, across the border from Matamoros. Every "the" after "the IRS" should be removed.


 * I am assuming we once again don't have much to show for Briones Ruiz's criminal career because that information is locked up in Mexico City.
 * Yes. The Mexican government tends to be very secretive of criminal investigations against cartel members and usually only releases details once suspects are arrested/convicted. I haven't been able to find any mention of Briones Ruiz's organized crime involvement prior to his U.S. indictment. Makes me think Mexican authorities may have been unaware of him until the U.S. brought it to their attention (this happens often since the threshold for evidence that can be used in a courtroom is different in both countries).


 * The drugs were distributed in U.S. states of Texas and Tennessee. Needs a "the" before "U.S. states".


 * Claudia Aidé Briones Ruiz (his sister) If at all possible, introduce the relatives of our subject in "Early life and background".