Talk:Abgig obelisk/GA1

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:42, 1 May 2023 (UTC)


 * This looks like a fun article! I will get to this within seven days. Please note that I am returning to GA reviewing after an hiatus, so please WP:TROUT me if I make a mistake. Thanks,  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 00:42, 1 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the interesting read! My knowledge is with Mesopotamia, especially the Akkadians and Biblical history, but this turned out to be a very fascinating read. Anyways, I have placed this on hold for now and left my comments below.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 03:06, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the thorough review! Let me know what you think of these changes.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:13, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * I like them a lot! I am now pleased to pass this wonderful article for GA status. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 22:41, 5 May 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio
Earwig says good to go. No concerns from me either.

Files
Good to go— is under CC-BY-SA;   has a valid public domain rationale;   too has a valid public domain rationale;   and   ibid.

Prose

 * In the lead, wikilink Register (art) for unfamiliar readers.
 * Done.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Faiyum as first mention in the body.
 * Done.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * In the sentence containing "the obelisk was visited and described by," I would order the figures by ascending year, so have Lepsius last.
 * Done.--Gen. Quon[Talk] 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "but he was unsuccessful in his search." – how about removing he for slightly better flow?
 * I reworded that whole sentence to make it more compact.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "and when it was first erected, it likely stood" – same point as above, but to remove redundant usage of it.
 * Done.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "hardly anything remains of the monument's inscriptions or its registers" – wikilink registers and unlink their mention in § Obverse side.
 * Done.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Seeing as it is speculative, does the source say why Maspero and Sourouzian think that the figure was a falcon made of metal? i.e. was that a symbol of Ancient Egypt?
 * I'm unsure. The source only reads, "Gaston Maspero and, more recently, Hourig Sourouzian, who connects this monument with the commemoration columns of Merenptah, have suggested that it was crowned by a statue of a falcon, possibly made of a different material, perhaps metal, to that of the monument itself" (p. 375).--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * I see.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 22:37, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * In the sentence starting "Of note, these deities" – are the parentheses necessary?
 * I reworded it and removed the parentheses.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * In the table, "Thot" links to a disambig page.
 * That was a typo! Fixed.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * In the königsnovelle note, I do not believe a comma should come after i.e.
 * This is the convention in American English. As I note below, however, I could understand switching to British English if that is seen as more appropriate.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Oh—interesting! It should be fine.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 22:37, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "and another god." – if unknown, recommend "and another unidentified god."
 * Done.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Not a fan of image galleries; they could easily be added as relevant under § History IMO.
 * I converted the gallery to a Multiple image template and placed it in the "History" section.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Looks good!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 22:37, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Recommend adding template:Use X English
 * Done. (I'm American, so I used "American English", but I could see a reasonable case being made for the switch to British English.)--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Recommend adding template:Use mdy dates (or your preferred date format).
 * Done.--<b style="background:#8B0000;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">Gen. Quon</b><b style="background:#2F4F4F;color:#FFF;padding:1px;">[Talk]</b> 14:12, 5 May 2023 (UTC)