Talk:Abigail Fillmore/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 09:56, 22 April 2023 (UTC)

Pix

 * All three are relevant and appropriately licensed.
 * Not a pass/fail issue but would be optimal to have alt text for accessibility

Copyvio

 * Earwig gives nothing and I'll do some spotchecks

Spotchecks

 * 5a "As an adult, she taught herself to speak French and to play the piano" bit close to source which says "As an adult she taught herself French and began studying piano" - I know there aren't many words to play with but you could say for example "learnt French"
 * 5b fine
 * 5c fine
 * 5d fine
 * 9a fine
 * 9c fine
 * 9h fine
 * 10b AGF
 * 6i "These plans were interrupted when she caught a cold that progressed into bronchitis and then pneumonia." bit close to source which says "Her cold had developed into bronchitis, and from there progressed to bronchitis" - I think i'd be happy if "progressed" was changed to another word
 * 3h fine
 * 3o fine
 * 3h fine
 * 3o fine

Prose

 * Reads well overall
 * "They moved in with Cyprus Powers" - what relation is Cyrus to them?
 * "While she held fashionable society in contempt, she enjoyed observing their behavior and participating in social parties" - society is singular, so maybe "people's behaviour"
 * " was an active first lady that hosted many social events" - "who hosted"?
 * "she designed the White House interior in the mind of a middle-class home" does "mind" make sense in US-eng? Reads funny to me, I guess I'd say "like" or "in the way of"
 * "As an antebellum first lady, " is antebellum the best word choice? because for me it refers more to Antebellum South, but this might be another US/Br eng thing
 * salon not wikilinked in article
 * lead good
 * "As an antebellum first lady, " is antebellum the best word choice? because for me it refers more to Antebellum South, but this might be another US/Br eng thing
 * salon not wikilinked in article
 * lead good
 * salon not wikilinked in article
 * lead good
 * lead good

Various
Stable, focused, neutral, broad, no OR

Overall
I shall take this on for review Mujinga (talk) 09:56, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * A few queries related to spotchecks and prose. Please respond on each point so I know if it's done or not. Putting article on hold for a week, let me know if you need longer, but the fixes should be fast - happy to discuss anything Mujinga (talk) 10:50, 22 April 2023 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed everything. Thebiguglyalien  ( talk ) 15:06, 22 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Great job that was very smooth. Good luck with the other First Ladies! Mujinga (talk) 15:14, 22 April 2023 (UTC)