Talk:Absolutely Sweet Marie/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

I will get on with this now! --K. Peake 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change Columbia Studio B to Columbia B in the infobox per the rules on the studio parameter
 * "of the double album Blonde on Blonde, Dylan's seventh studio album, on June 20, 1966." → "of the double album and Dylan's seventh studio album, Blonde on Blonde (1966)." or something similar since the exact release date of the album is not notable
 * Move the recording sentence to being the one after writing/production; follow it with the interpretation one
 * Move the later inclusion to being after the total number of performances in the second para, followed finally by the cover version
 * ""Absolutely Sweet Marie" was recorded at" → "It was recorded at"
 * "Rolling Stone placed the track" → "Rolling Stone placed it" with the wikilink
 * All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:09, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Background and recording

 * You need to add Robbie Robertson's guitar playing to prose to warrant keeping the image
 * Used the Kooper image here instead, with some commentary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Merge the first and second paras per the overly short size
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Where is the November 30 session sourced?
 * Added Bjorner for 1965. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after Al Kooper
 * "session musicians including" → "session musicians, including"
 * "Wayne Moss and Kenneth Buttrey," → "Wayne Moss, and Kenneth Buttrey," with the pipe
 * "initially on February 14." → "initially on February 14, 1966."
 * "during the tenth album session," → "during the 10th album session," per MOS:NUM
 * "which was released on June 20, 1966." → "on June 20, 1966." because included was already used
 * Move the last para of this section to being in comp instead since that is what it focuses on
 * "makes the track work."" → "makes the track work"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Amended per the eight points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Composition and lyrical interpretation

 * Add the last para from the previous section at the start here; the instrumentation also should be mentioned in this section
 * "that line does not appear" → "the line does not appear"
 * "Journalist Paul Williams considered that" → "Journalist Paul Williams considers that"
 * [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
 * "and named "Absolutely Sweet Marie"" → "and names "Absolutely Sweet Marie""
 * "fear of being misunderstood)."" → ""fear of being misunderstood)"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "from first to last."" → "from first to last"." per above
 * Shouldn't you use the title rather than "Dylan's song"?
 * "half sick/traffic" why is there a single quote mark to end this part but not one to start it?
 * "out of key chord."" → "out of key chord"."
 * Amended the article per the above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * You should use a consistent past or present tense for the reviews here
 * "highly distinctive rhythm."" → "highly distinctive rhythm"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "still felicitously possible."" → "still felicitously possible"." per above
 * "The reviewer for" → "A reviewer for"
 * "sparkling blues-rock guitar."" → "sparkling blues-rock guitar"."
 * "Dylan said of the song" → "Dylan said of the song:"
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:27, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Live performances and other releases

 * Looks good!

Personnel

 * Remove the img per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE, especially when you have already used an image of another performer from this section
 * Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey
 * Done. I've changed the source, and the credits per that source. Sanders (2020) seems to be the best available. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:00, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, after a quick review! --K. Peake 09:42, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, . Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:18, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
 * You have not added the instrumentation from personnel to prose like I was intending you to do with the suggestion. --K. Peake 21:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Apologies, . I've now added that in. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:13, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, this is laid out well after all! --K. Peake 11:37, 29 November 2022 (UTC)