Talk:Ace Attorney Investigations: Miles Edgeworth/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 07:00, 1 October 2015 (UTC)

I should be able to get this done before the end of this week. AdrianGamer (talk) 07:00, 1 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Is this game a single-player-only game? If it is, add "Single-player to the mode field of the infobox.
 * I suggest to split the lead into multiple paragraph. One paragraph for basic information, one paragraph for gameplay, one paragraph for development and one paragraph for reception/sequel.
 * The game was directed by Takeshi Yamazaki and produced by Motohide Eshiro, with character designs by Tatsuro Iwamoto and music by Noriyuki Iwadare and Yasuko Yamada - There is a lot of names here, but most readers would not know about their importance. I suggest replacing these with actual development information, such as how the game was developed.
 * I have already added everything I could find about the game's development in reliable sources. Do you suggest I just remove the names? Should I then remove the names from the infobox as well, as they will no longer be sourced in the article? Or should I remove the names from the prose and move the refs to the infobox?
 * No, only remove their names from the lead. I did not make it clear. Sorry about that.
 * ✅ That makes a lot more sense. I was wondering why you commented the development section this early in the review, and then went back to the gameplay section!
 * and have him walk around crime scenes in search for evidence. - Split it to a new sentence.
 * At certain points, a device called Little Thief can be used to create hologram reproductions of the crime scene, updating the hologram as more evidence is uncovered - flow does not sound right. I suggest to split into two different sentences.
 * I am a bit confused by the Little Thief device. Do this mean that you can use the device to see hologram reproductions, study the reproductions, and after finding new clues, the hologram would be updated?
 * Yes. I changed the bit about Little Thief while addressing your previous point - do you think it's clear enough now? If not, do you have any suggestions for how to make it clearer?
 * By doing this, the player aims to get closer to the truth - "aims to" is not necessary.
 * a green gauge called the Truth Gauge decreases - What the Truth Gauge actually represents?
 * ✅ It represents how far Edgeworth is from the truth - a pretty abstract idea, I guess, but that's how it is. It's mentioned in-game, but I was only able to find one RS that said it. You'd think the manual would mention it, but nope.
 * The case name is not entirely necessary. It should focus on the overarching story, so The backstory of the game is described in the fourth case, Turnabout Reminiscence (過ぎ去りし逆転 Sugisarishi Gyakuten? is not really important. I do not think it is necessary to link their Japanese name as well.
 * I did this because Apollo Justice: Ace Attorney, another GA, mentioned the case names. I have now removed the names, but feel that due to the episodic nature of the story, and how the chronology differs from the play order, it's still relevant to mention that it's the fourth or first or whateverth case. If I came here after finishing the game, being confused by the plot due to the nonchronological nature of it, it would help me if the plot section told me what case the different events occurred in.
 * You can play these cases in whatever order you like? I do not know about that. Then the name is important. Sorry about that.
 * No, sorry. I think I used "nonchronological" wrong. I meant to say that because the player experiences the cases in a different order from the one that the cases actually take place in, there's the potential for confusion, especially if you, like me, take your time and play it over a longer period of time, forgetting stuff about the earlier cases. I could definitely see myself come to Wikipedia to understand the plot better, and having the plot section indicating the cases clearly would make that easier for me. If you want me to remove the "in the Xth case, ..." stuff, I can do it, though.
 * Maybe in this situation mentioning the name of these cases can be less confusing. You can add back the English name of these cases.
 * formed a group called Yatagarasu - What kind of group it is?
 * Yatagarasu is the name used by Calisto, Faraday, and Badd, when they steal corporate files and make them public. Should I rewrite it to "Feeling that the justice system was powerless to those who stand above the law, Faraday, Badd, and Yew's sister Calisto, started stealing corporate files detailing illegal or unethical activities and exposed them to the media, under the name Yatagarasu."? I am not quite sure what you want me to do here, to be honest...
 * I am saying whether it is a secret group or not. But you should rewrite it. It sounds much clear this way
 * Is the plot section arrange in chronological order? The first case is not really related to the main plot.
 * It is arranged in the order the cases take place, ie not the play order. I'd argue the first case is indeed related, as it has the smuggling ring trying to remove evidence connecting them to the embassy. Are there any specific changes you want me to make?
 * i am thinking that the plot should be more straightforward, like telling a story instead of individual chapters. I am satisfied with how this look now though.
 * All right, then.
 * The plot section seems to have introduce too many characters that normal readers would find a bit overwhelming. I suggest adding a small little character section to talk about the protagonists and villains before getting into the main story
 * I am not sure if this is what you had in mind, but I have added a little bit of this to the "Setting" section, which I renamed "Setting and characters".
 * According to Eshiro, the game was made to be played "on the go" - What does "on the go" means then?
 * ✅ It just means portable play. It was conceived with handheld consoles in mind.
 * Rephrase the Nintendo DS felt like the most natural fit, too close to the text from the source. Or you can add some quotation marks to it.
 * because the Ace Attorney character Ema Skye wants to be a forensic scientist, it made sense to them to use her in the game - This sounds very odd. May be you can rephrase it to something like "Ema Skye, who was a forensic scientist from the original Ace Attorney was set to be the main protagonist, but the team chose the more popular Miles Edgeworth based on fans feedback.}}
 * In the original Ace Attorney, Ema wants to be a forensic scientist, but she is actually just a student. I've changed it a bit - is it clear enough now?
 * and had him investigate incidents together with Dick Gumshoe - I did not get the importance of Gumshoe in this game in the plot section. I suggest to remove this part of the sentence.
 * It was also a challenge to make the game feel new while also retaining the feeling of the main series - Do not use "challenge" again. Rephrase it to something like "The team also thought that it was difficult to make the game feel new while also retaining the feeling of the main series."
 * Do not use the exact wordings from sources, like retaining the feeling of the main series, larger mystery that Edgeworth needs to solve,
 * Yamazaki would then rewrite parts - A bit confusing, it sounds like that he will rewrite the story even though the players do not find any problem with it.
 * Yamazaki would then rewrite parts, change the order of parts, and add hints is also too similar to the source text rewrites a few things, changes the order of things around, adds a hint here
 * He said that they think players will feel a connection with Edgeworth and understand his character - Does the source mention anything about how the team achieve this goal?
 * ✅ The bit just previous to this one says how they aimed to do it, yes. These sentences ended up in the wrong order due to me writing them out of order.
 * several characters come in and out during each scene at a rapid pace - who are these "characters"? Witnesses and rival characters?
 * Eshiro only says that many different characters come in and out. Yes, it is witnesses, rival characters, and partners, but the source doesn't say this. Do you have any suggestions? Should I just leave it as it is?
 * If the source does not mention anything about this, you should leave it as it is.
 * All right, cool.
 * while also keeping the spirit of the original Japanese version. - suggest to change to "staying true to the Japanese version". This way it would sound less similar to the source. The same goes for struggle to get the tone of the localization right (Rephrase it to "found difficulties in getting the western's version's tone right or correct."
 * Round GameRankings scores to the nearest percent
 * felt that the series was running out of steam - Do the IGN review explain why?
 * No. I think the reviewer just thought that there had been a lot of pretty similar games in the series, but she doesn't actually say it.
 * said that the was a "successful twist" on the gameplay of the previous games in the series, - "there". What is the "successful twist"?
 * The missing word here was "game", which I think makes it more clear. What the reviewer is saying is that the game as a whole is a successful twist on the gameplay from the previous games.
 * There is a category for this game (Category:Interquel video games), but the article only mentions that it was set after the events after the third game but does not mention the gap Investigations bridged.
 * Not much problem besides the several close paraphrasing problem I mentioned
 * ✅ The bit just previous to this one says how they aimed to do it, yes. These sentences ended up in the wrong order due to me writing them out of order.
 * several characters come in and out during each scene at a rapid pace - who are these "characters"? Witnesses and rival characters?
 * Eshiro only says that many different characters come in and out. Yes, it is witnesses, rival characters, and partners, but the source doesn't say this. Do you have any suggestions? Should I just leave it as it is?
 * If the source does not mention anything about this, you should leave it as it is.
 * All right, cool.
 * while also keeping the spirit of the original Japanese version. - suggest to change to "staying true to the Japanese version". This way it would sound less similar to the source. The same goes for struggle to get the tone of the localization right (Rephrase it to "found difficulties in getting the western's version's tone right or correct."
 * Round GameRankings scores to the nearest percent
 * felt that the series was running out of steam - Do the IGN review explain why?
 * No. I think the reviewer just thought that there had been a lot of pretty similar games in the series, but she doesn't actually say it.
 * said that the was a "successful twist" on the gameplay of the previous games in the series, - "there". What is the "successful twist"?
 * The missing word here was "game", which I think makes it more clear. What the reviewer is saying is that the game as a whole is a successful twist on the gameplay from the previous games.
 * There is a category for this game (Category:Interquel video games), but the article only mentions that it was set after the events after the third game but does not mention the gap Investigations bridged.
 * Not much problem besides the several close paraphrasing problem I mentioned
 * There is a category for this game (Category:Interquel video games), but the article only mentions that it was set after the events after the third game but does not mention the gap Investigations bridged.
 * Not much problem besides the several close paraphrasing problem I mentioned
 * Not much problem besides the several close paraphrasing problem I mentioned

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Article is well-written and comprehensive, supported by reliable sources. There is only small issues preventing it from getting its GA status. When all the problems are fixed, the article is good to go. AdrianGamer (talk) 05:42, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the fast and helpful review! I have fixed most problems, but have some questions, as seen above.--IDVtalk 08:40, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I have done some more fixes now, and replied about the use of "in the Xth case". I notice you haven't replied to the bit about the character section and my questions about Little Thief and Ema Skye - just want to check if you missed them or if they're fine now.--IDVtalk 09:39, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I am satisfied with how you handle the information about the Little Thief, character section, and Ema Skye.
 * All right! I think everything has been taken care of now. --IDVtalk 10:08, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Great! Thank you very much for addressing all the issues so quickly. Ace Attorney Investigations: Miles Edgeworth is now a . Congratulations. AdrianGamer (talk) 10:11, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
 * That's awesome! Thank you so much for giving such an in-depth and helpful review and responding to my questions quickly! --IDVtalk 10:16, 3 October 2015 (UTC)