Talk:Ace Combat 3: Electrosphere/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 01:33, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

This looks solid. ♦ jaguar  01:33, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * " such as destroying a fleet of enemies" - I feel that such as destroying squadrons of enemies works better
 * Fixed. You're right, it does look better.
 * "base for the game's ideas and mechanics" - link game mechanics
 * Done.


 * Gameplay
 * The screenshot caption could benefit from a little more detail - what are the clockwise elements of the HUD?
 * Specified what the HUD elements are.


 * Development
 * "Drama shows and the game R4: Ridge Racer Type 4 (1998) served as inspiration for this idea" - by drama shows, do you mean television programmes?
 * Yes, that's what I meant. I linked Drama (film and television) in that sentence.
 * "This led to the game's futuristic, science fiction setting and world" - the comma isn't necessary
 * Tossed.
 * "the team's limited skills made them skeptical if their vision and world could properly be implemented" - this would flow better as the team's limited skills made them skeptical of their vision and world being implemented
 * Rewrote.


 * Release
 * "The company broke the silence in November, opening up an website" - a website
 * That was a typo. Fixed.
 * "Only a single level and a select few aircraft were shown" - repetition of 'show' in previous sentence; revealed may be better
 * Replaced with "revealed".


 * Reception
 * I noticed that the names of reviewers aren't mentioned in the text. This won't by any means hold a GAN back but the prose will markedly improve if reviewers' comments were linked back to their names rather than publications - something to consider if you take this to FAC
 * I often flip-flop between using reviewer names or just the names of the publications since I don't have a solid opinion or preference on it. I've decided to mention their names in the review as I'm thinking of taking this to FAC sometime soon.
 * "It holds a 74% on the video game review aggregator" - missing word
 * Another typo. Fixed.
 * "Official Czech PlayStation Magazine had a similar response" - missing 'the' before Official
 * Added.
 * "Official UK PlayStation Magazine said that it felt" - missing definite article here too. The publication is also missing a link
 * Added both of those.

This article has improved a lot since its last review. It is well-written, comprehensive and the sources all check out. I've left a few comments regarding the prose for you to consider. Once the above are out of the way this will be good to go. ♦ jaguar  17:33, 6 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Addressed all concerns. Thank you for your comments. Namcokid  47  (Contribs) 21:45, 6 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now. Time to promote ♦  jaguar  22:57, 6 January 2021 (UTC)