Talk:Ace Driver/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:22, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

Will take on this review. MWright96 (talk) 19:22, 3 November 2019 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lede

 * "and to avoid collision with opponents and other obstacles." - there is the missing word "a" between "avoid" and "collision" ✅
 * "with assistance by Pole Position designer Shinichiro Okamoto." - from ✅
 * "The arcade cabinet is known for being heavier than Namco's other cabinets," - try to avoid using the phrase "is known for" ✅
 * "The development team took care into producing the game's controls to make them responsive and easy to use, which Okamoto recalls being as responsive as moving a shopping cart." - replace one of the mentions of the word "responsive" with a similarly formal word ✅
 * "A PlayStation home conversion was announced in 1995, but was never released." - How about A PlayStation home conversion announced in 1995 went unreleased.? ✅

Gameplay

 * "The player can also choose between Automatic or Manual transmission, which respectively disable and enable the use of the gear shift," - this text is not mentioned in the source coupled with it. Thus an additional reference that explicitly states this information will be required
 * "Cars also carry advertisements featuring names of older" - you're missing the word "the" between "featuring" and "names" in this sentence
 * "The player can also choose between Automatic or Manual transmission," - the word "an" is needed between the words "between" and "Automatic" ✅

Development and release

 * "with assistance by Pole Position designer Shinichiro Okamoto." - same issue as raised with the second point in the lede section ✅
 * "is known for being much heavier than Namco's other arcade cabinets," - same issue as raised with the third point in the lede section ✅
 * I haven't seen this issue addressed at all in the article. MWright96 (talk)
 * "was stated to have been dangerous if the cabinet was placed up against the wall," - I believe in the event would be a better substitute to replace the text highlighted in bold Some

Reception

 * "being praised for its impressive technological capabilities and realistic graphics." - by whom? Players, reviewers, the gaming industery? ✅
 * "The game was also a commercial hit" Commerical hit looks informal to my eyes. It could be easily stated that the game was a "Commercial success" ✅
 * "thanks to the Namco Super System 22 arcade hardware it ran on." - better; due to its Namco Super System 22 arcade operating hardware. ✅
 * "They concluded their review with that" - by saying Some
 * "and bad collision detection," - the word poor is a more formal to replace the text in bold in this section of text
 * Have not seen any changes regarding the point above. MWright96 (talk) 13:07, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Sequels and legacy

 * "featuring additional tracks and vehicles to select, alongside a new "Championship" gameplay mode." - elimimnate the text in bold because it is redundant ✅
 * "A home conversion of Ace Driver for the PlayStation was announced to be in development in August 1995, however it was never released." - in August 1995; it was not released. ✅
 * "The soundtrack for Ace Driver was released in 1995 by Victor Entertainment as part of their Namco Game Sound Express album series." - this statement is currently uncited and will require a reliable source to be attacted to it ✅
 * Also, the same sentence could be reworded to say Victor Entertainment released the soundtrack to Ace Driver as part of its Namco Game Sound Express album series in 1995. ✅