Talk:Action of 28 February 1799/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:13, 30 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:13, 30 July 2015 (UTC)


 * No DABs, external links OK.
 * Image appropriately licensed.
 * British merchant shipping accessing the port of Calcutta Accessing reads oddly here, perhaps "using" instead.
 * Cooke's deputy Lieutenant Lucius Hardyman don't you mean 1st Lieutenant or executive officer? Whichever one has the more appropriate link.
 * Link East Indies, prize crew, bulkhead, rigging, mast, cross-jack yard.
 * Cross-jack yard redirects to the same place as mast, otherwise done.--

Jackyd101 (talk) 18:00, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I went ahead and linked Yard (sailing) for you, just to put it to bed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:20, 4 August 2015 (UTC)


 * If the French were blockaded in Ile de France, how then did the reinforcements get there? Did they drive off the blockaders or did the British retreat on their own?
 * "complimented" complemented, I believe.
 * These two clauses need a better conjunction.
 * Which clauses?--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:00, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, I can see how you might find actually telling you which clauses were problematic useful. And now I can't find them...--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:20, 4 August 2015 (UTC)


 * The ship was however weakened by an ill-disciplined crew Perhaps some commas here?
 * autumn of 1798, on which they achieved Perhaps "during" rather than "on"?
 * British naval commander Rear-Admiral Peter Rainier had taken commas around the name and rank.
 * This ship was the 40-gun HMS Sybille a large comma after the name.
 * formidable ship against most opponents, but significantly weaker could profitably drop "against most opponents"
 * What kind of ship was Fox?
 * What was a "country ship" and a Canton ship?
 * In rapid succession Forte seized the country ships Recovery, Yarmouth, Chance and Surprise,[19] these ships requiring 143 French sailors to be sent away as prize crew, more than a quarter of the complement. Awkward, could use a little unpacking for general readers, I think.
 * the lieutenant being promoted to commander the lieutenant is redundant here.
 * The Canton ships Endeavour and Lord Mornington were taken off Balasore on 28 February under fire from Forte's bow chasers. This reads oddly. Perhaps something that says that they surrendered after Forte sent shots across their bows?
 * That's not what the sentence means - I've tried to rephrase, but since bow-chasers are linked hopefully its clear.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:00, 4 August 2015 (UTC)

--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:47, 1 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I've done them all except the ones I've replied to again. Thanks for the review!--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:00, 4 August 2015 (UTC)