Talk:Active camouflage/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:06, 7 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) at 15:36, 14 December 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. I'll respond promptly to any questions. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:52, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Prose

 * The article has three paragraphs in the lead. Just one would be sufficient, given the length of the article. Suggesting to merge the paragraphs
 * Done.


 * Lead: Animals achieve active camouflage both by color change and (among marine animals such as squid) by counter-illumination v. Prose: There are two mechanisms of active camouflage in animals: Counter-illumination, and color change — any reason for change in order or "Counter-illumination" and "color change"
 * Harmonised.


 * "a wide range of background textures" — the prose does not make clear where this quote comes from
 * Repeated ref for clarity.


 * WP:SANDWICHING in "In research" section


 * Lead: during World War II v. Prose: Second World War — consistency needen
 * Fixed.


 * of the United States of America — should be "of the United States"
 * Fixed.


 * OLEDs is never used again in the prose. Do we need to specify the acronym?
 * Gone.


 * Same with PAO
 * Gone.


 * counter-illumination is linked twice in the prose.

That is it! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:28, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

 * Images can take ALT text
 * Added.


 * 1 non-free image is appropriately licenced.
 * Noted.