Talk:Adam Murray/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:39, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments That's enough to be getting on with. On hold. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:08, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "17-year" should be hyphenated.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * I would expand U20 on the first mention.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link promotion.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "and Football Conference." vs "Conference National"?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "play-offs in 2005" probably ought to have the whole lot in the pipe.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Could link captain.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "much of his 97" many, not much.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Could link "loan".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Is there a link for caretaker?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link substitute.
 * It already was?--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "1998–99 season" etc etc, put the "season" inside the pipe.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Could link "manager".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "Derby would be relegated" avoid the "would be" and stick with "were".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "Murray would feature only" ditto, -> "Murray featured irregularly"
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "for the "Stags", " avoid these unexplained nicknames.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link "sending off".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "after a tough spell battling alcohol addiction" bit tabloidy.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "overcame this battle" ditto.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "transfer-listed" is there a link?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "helping the "Cumbrians" to qualify" again, no unsourced/unexplained nicknames.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "of the 2006–07 League One season" this is confusing linking.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "; "Gulls" manager" see above.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "for the "Silkmen"" etc. Not mentioning it again.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "a virtual ever-present" what is that?? "nearly ever-present"??
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "A back operation caused Murray" maybe "Following an operation on his back, Murray..."?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "but he now saw Wilder as one of the best manager in " -> "but now saw him as one of the best managers in "
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "Hatters", but departed" probably "and" rather than "but".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "20 miles from" convert.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link extra time.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "to qualify for the play-offs" is there a link?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "red carded" hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link player-manager.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "with energy and tenacity whose natural talent" according to whom??
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "later at Field Mill, was" overlinked.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Any link for "free transfer"?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "After a successful month" more like two weeks??!
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "in 21st-place" no hyphen required.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "in 15th-place and" again. Not mentioning this again.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "at Burton Albion.[103]" Burton is overlinked.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "to assist Valérien Ismaël" no need to repeat his first name.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "is known as a manager with an eye for detail" according to whom??
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "Karl Hawley was" who he?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Fix all the spaced hyphens (should be en-dashes)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Consistent BBC Sport or just BBC Sport.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Okay thank you, I've done all that.--EchetusXe 08:44, 2 May 2022 (UTC)