Talk:Addie Joss Benefit Game/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 17:11, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:11, 9 August 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * Lead looks good!

Background

 * Link Ernest Barnard
 * Done, didn't realize he was notable. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:17, 12 August 2021 (UTC)

Organization

 * Perhaps give the name of Joss’s widow.
 * Added her name and the kids to the "Background" section. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:41, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
 * According to the SABR article, it looks like Walsh had planned to participate (hence his mention in the newspapers) but was unable to. I would rephrase it thusly: “Each team sent at least one player, with the exception of the Chicago White Sox.  Though White Sox pitcher Ed Walsh had originally agreed to participate and even volunteered to pitch the entire game, Chicago’s schedule ultimately prevented him or any other White Sox players from attending.
 * Reworded to something similar. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:17, 12 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”Cobb made an anonymous donation” – “Cobb made what was initially an anonymous donation”
 * Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:22, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Link Boston Red Sox (not mentioned earlier)
 * Done – Muboshgu (talk) 00:17, 12 August 2021 (UTC)
 * According to Baseball-Reference, the Dayton minor league team was the Veterans.
 * The source doesn't mention it, and Dayton Veterans is a red link, so I think it's okay as it is. – Muboshgu (talk) 02:22, 22 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”There were no expenses” – I would change this to “No compensation had to be paid”, since there might technically have been some expenses (travel, utility bills, etc.).
 * I took it out. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:23, 22 August 2021 (UTC)

The game

 * Should rosters be cited?
 * There wouldn't be a problem citing the All-Star roster. But, this brings up an issue with the Cleveland roster. There was no one site that said "these are the guys who were on the roster for Cleveland on July 24". I used B Ref to see who was on the team at the time, player page by player page. I guess I could cite each one individually? – Muboshgu (talk) 16:25, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
 * According to the Baseball Hall of Fame, the panoramic photo shows Joe Birmingham, Terry Turner, Jack Graney, unidentified, Art Griggs, Fred Blanding, unidentified, Ivy Olson, unidentified, Cy Young, Joe Jackson, Bill James, Cy Falkenberg, Vean Gregg, George Stovall, Willie Mitchell, unidentified, Nap Lajoie, Syd Smith, unidentified, Neal Ball, Ted Easterly Eight unidentified! And I've listed one person too many, it appears. – Muboshgu (talk) 17:24, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
 * The players I have listed in the roster that are not identified in the photo are George Kahler, Gene Krapp, Gus Fisher, Jack Mills, Hank Butcher, and Tim Hendryx. But that's six people. – Muboshgu (talk) 17:35, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
 * I think I solved the issue by removing the Cleveland roster, which I can't fully verify, and sourcing the all-stars. – Muboshgu (talk) 03:49, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Game summary

 * I would list the starting pitchers somewhere in the article.
 * Added to "Game play" – Muboshgu (talk) 16:22, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Should the boxscore and lineups be cited?
 * I added the recap reference, which has the boxscore and inning-by-inning recap, to the linescore template. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:19, 21 August 2021 (UTC)

Legacy
Looks good! Just a few minor fixes. Let me know once you’ve done these, and I’ll give the article another look! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:40, 9 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Minor thing—first two sentences start with “In,” so maybe reword the beginning of one of them?
 * Fixed – Muboshgu (talk) 17:25, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
 * , thanks! I'll try to get around to it today. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:18, 11 August 2021 (UTC)
 * , I took longer than I thought to finish but I think it's ready for you to reexamine. – Muboshgu (talk) 03:49, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, passing. Excellent work! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:03, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
 * , thank you! – Muboshgu (talk) 22:44, 26 August 2021 (UTC)