Talk:Adelir Antônio de Carli/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 23:36, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * Per MOS:LEADCITE, leads should generally not have citations.
 * Done.
 * Remove "Brazil" in the "also known in Brazil".
 * Done.
 * Him being a experienced skydiver isn't mentioned in the body of the article.
 * Removed.
 * Explain how cluster ballooning would raise money.
 * Done?
 * Add wikilink to port city. (MOS:LINKING is optional)
 * Done.

Biography

 * Add wikilinks to the cities (Pelotas, Rio Grande do Sul and Ampére, Paraná). (MOS:LINKING is optional)
 * Done.
 * Since it has a de, isn't his last name Antônio de Carli? If so, it should be used instead of just Carli.
 * "de" isn't included when you're referring to someone with a Portuguese name (see Portuguese name).
 * When was his ordination?
 * Reworded that sentence.
 * Is it known why did he became a priest?
 * I can't find a reason for it in any sources.
 * Remove the agents from the wikilink. (MOS:LINKING is optional)
 * Done.
 * Remove duplicated wikilink from "Municipal Guard agents". (MOS:LINKING is optional)
 * Done.
 * Was he involved in any religious organization, event or something along the lines since this is common in priests.
 * I don't think so?
 * I know he is mostly known for the balloon event but is this all there is about his life?
 * Pretty much.

Fatal cluster ballooning attempt

 * Maybe try to trim the section title to just "Cluster ballooning event/attempt"? (optional)
 * Done.
 * rest stop → rest area
 * Done.
 * I don't understand how cluster ballooning would fund a spiritual rest area for truckers, you should clarify that.
 * Clarified.
 * Here "de Carli" is used, independently if the above suggestion is true or not, you should try to be consistent.
 * Fixed.
 * Per WP:SEAOFBLUE, don't wikilink Argentina.
 * Done.
 * The second paragraph starts immediatly describing the new attempt, you should give context. For example, "On DD MM YYYY, before his second attempt, Carli held a mass..."
 * Done.
 * What did he do in concrete to be expelled? Is it known? This phrase should be put in the Biography section since it's not that relevant to the cluster ballooning attempt.
 * Expanded it a bit, let me know if it's not substantial enough.
 * The quotation is in conformity with MOS:FOREIGNQUOTE.
 * Is there more information on his training? The training should be at the beggining of the section in order for the events to be in cronological order.
 * Moved. I couldn't find any more info about it anywhere.

Image(s)

 * If we must use a non-free image can't we at least find one with a bit more quality? Or is this the only one available? The map has a free license and a suitable caption.
 * The majority of good non-free images are from photo agencies (or they don't have enough info to be properly tagged), but I can try to find a more suitable picture.
 * Couldn't find anything.

Stability

 * Last edit 2 days ago, no edit wars in place; overall stable, pass!

Comments

 * Just with source 2 I was capable of finding a lot of information that isn't in the article. I'm going to put this on hold and let you have some days to do an overall expansion, ping me when you're done and I will take another look. Thank you.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 00:27, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I'm a bit hesitant to add info from source 2 since none of the what is mentioned there is included in any other sources. I'll try to expand from it nonetheless. –  01:02, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Banda B seems reliable enough, maybe they simply decided to take a step further in researching the life of the priest.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 01:20, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * all done. –  13:46, 17 March 2024 (UTC)