Talk:Adolfo Rodríguez Saá

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1) In the section Adolfo Rodríguez Saá is the following sentence:


 * He was helped by the clergy of the province, who opposed the radical candidate because of his laicism.

While "laicism" is a word (see ), it is an unusual word. Wiktionary gives "secularism" as the synonym. If "laicism" is to be used there, I think it should be linked, perhaps to a Wikipedia article. I linked it to Separation of church and state, but changed my mind and took the link out (I got confused and thought it was the opposite, then realized it wasn't). So here are several possibilities:


 * Separation of church and state
 * Secularism
 * Anti-clericalism
 * Laïcité

and there may be others.

2) The last sentence in the section Adolfo Rodríguez Saá is:


 * He attempted to divide the city of San Luis into four municipalities, as it was ruled by a non-aligned mayor, but had to drop the project because of the popular unrest generated by the proposal.

"Non-aligned" is not usually used in English to refer to a political figure of a different political party, so the phrase "as it was ruled by a non-aligned mayor" doesn't convey much to the reader. You could say that the mayor was a political rival, or a member of a different (or an opposing) political party. You could also re-phrase it and say (if it is true), "in order to dilute the power of the mayor, a member of an opposing political party" (or even name the mayor's political party); you can't say this if it's not true, and you should provide a source if it is true and you want to say this. But perhaps it's not that important, and if that's the case, you can just leave the phrase out.

I'm going to re-word this. Corinne (talk) 15:41, 5 October 2015 (UTC) I changed it to, "the mayor was a member of an opposing party". If, however, there was only one opposing political party, this should be changed to: "the mayor was a member of the opposing party" (and perhaps the party could be mentioned, too). Corinne (talk) 15:45, 5 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Actually, they were rivals but they were from the same party. Peronism has a dominant-party system in most of the provinces of Argentina, such as San Luis; the lack of a credible risk of losing to another party leads the members of such party to fight between themselves more than they would do otherwise. Cambalachero (talk) 16:07, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

3) In the third paragraph in the section "Early life" is the following sentence:


 * Rodríguez Saá became a provincial legislator, and led the Peronist deputees in the chamber.

The word "deputees" is unusual in English. The more common word is "deputy", plural "deputies". I'm not sure that is the best word to use, either. Do you mean "party members", "[elected] representatives", or perhaps "political appointees", or "cronies"? Corinne (talk) 01:56, 4 October 2015 (UTC) I changed it to "deputies". Corinne (talk) 19:34, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

 I'd appreciate your help here. Corinne (talk) 19:36, 4 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I don't follow all the copyediting standards on WP; I only follow FAC standards (and I don't believe there's been a FAC-related request for this one). Also, I prefer to wait until an article actually hits Peer Review or FAC, so that I can see what other copyeditors are saying before I weigh in. - Dank (push to talk) 00:37, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

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