Talk:Adrift (Lost)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 05:44, 2 February 2011 (UTC)


 * Hello, I'm The Cheesy Kid, I'll be reviewing this article. I have quite a few qualms with the article that would require fixing for it to become a good article
 * The sentence "... realtime events show Michael and James "Sawyer" Ford..." The James "Sawyer" Ford part is clunky, perhaps James "Sawyer" Ford|Sawyer would work?
 * Same sentence, "who just had their raft destroyed", should be "who have just had"...
 * First instance of season one requires a link.
 * season one's finale Exodus - should be season one's finale, Exodus.
 * seen on the previous... should be seen in the previous...
 * shot at the Hawaiian shoreline... shot on? the Hawaiian shoreline...
 * "The sea scenes were shot at the Hawaiian shoreline, with Michael's portrayer Harold Perrineau having swimming lessons as preparation, and a mechanic shark built by the crew members suffering technical difficulties" That entire sentence needs revision.
 * "second biggest audience" doesn't sound encyclopaedic, largest?
 * of the series' run?
 * with criticism on... doesn't make sense, with ... receiving criticism?
 * Michael (Harold Perrineau)struggles (No space between ) and struggles)
 * "suing to keep his custody" "in order to" instead of "to".
 * this devolves into... how can something devolve into an argument?
 * "the shark, which breaks off" needs changing
 * "Michael then joins Sawyer in the pontoon." on the pontoon surely?
 * notices that they are back at the island... at the island? Needs revision.
 * "they are greeted by Jin" They aren't greeted by Jin, sounds too civil
 * "convinces Desmond she should be tied up" Desmond that she should...
 * "After many struggles" after much struggle... no?
 * centric and feature Jolene Blalock... and were to feature
 * Director Stephen Williams described filming at the sea as challenging since cameras, lighting and the scenery where the actors were standing were "all moving out of sync with one another", but considering that the location helped to add realism to the scenes... Entire sentence needs revision.
 * tuned into this episode... into the episode
 * First sentence of the reception section has too many uses of the word "episode".

Lots of Work

 * Need I subnote that a lot of work is needed for this article to become a good article, but if all changes are made and the plot section is sufficiently rewritten, the article could be passed, at the moment however, it's a fail.

Main Review
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria Note: I will refrain from putting anything on hold, since there seems to be no-one significantly contributing to the improvement of the article.
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A: I have to confess that the article is not written well enough to become a good article. The prose isn't up to scratch. There are quite a few grammatical errors that have yet to be fixed.
 * B: The Manual of Style is acceptable however.
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A: References to Sources, acceptable.
 * B: Citation of reliable sources are great.
 * C: Original research seems to be minimal but not non-existent. The production section has a few sentences without references that could be construed as original research.
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A: Major aspects, it isn't quite broad enough, it seems too short and a little void of information, perhaps a few more paragraphs.
 * B: Focused: Definitely focused.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It is a fair representation without bias: Negative and positive reviews.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * Yes. Absolutely no edit wars.
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A: It has 2 images, both are relevant and free.
 * B: Images have suitable captions and are provided where possible and appropriate.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Mainly due to writing flaws and a long list of grammatical errors, it's nearly there, but needs a bit of work first.