Talk:Aedes taeniorhynchus/GA1

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)

Dunkleosteus77

 * In Larval in-stars, I don't get why you have the sub-subheadings. You don't really need them. If you're listening to some WikiProject guidelines, don't. Look at GA or FA articles and see what they do if you really need guidance, but just do what's best for the article  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I have removed these sub-subheadings. XuLily (talk) 19:06, 5 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Okay so I've shuffled the text around as best as I could just skimming all the info, check if it flows well, rearrange the images to prevent cluttering, see if some information better belongs in a different subsection  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:24, 7 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Fantastic, thank you! I will plan to get to the last bullet point over the weekend. XuLily (talk) 15:01, 7 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Last sentence of the first par of the lead is too sciencey, you can just say something like "Like other mosquitos, females generally, though with exceptions, have to consume a blood meal before laying eggs."  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I have reworded this sentence, combining the previous text and the quote you suggested. Could you please take a look and let me know what you think? XuLily (talk) 19:11, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "used in experimental studies and observational studies" I don't think there's any other kind of study, and the fact that is studied is not something you actually have to clarify  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I removed this redundancy. I initially included this sentence (lead paragraph 2, sentence 1) to lead into the next sentence, which focuses on the organism's periodic cycles. Do you think it would be better if I combined these sentences to remove any introduction about the mosquito being studied? e.g. "From studies on this mosquito of development, physiology, and behavioral patterns, this species is noted for developing in periodic cycles, with high sensitivity to light and flight patterns that result in specific wingbeat frequencies that allow for both species detection and sex distinction." XuLily (talk) 19:21, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "that result in specific frequencies" frequencies of what?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I specified that this refers to wingbeat frequencies. XuLily (talk) 19:22, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Synonyms of the species go in the taxobox, not in the lead. You add the parameter |synonyms =  and then make a bulleted list, and for the references, you put |synonyms_ref =  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:42, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I removed the synonyms from the lead and added them with references to the taxobox. XuLily (talk) 19:36, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * you there?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:10, 5 February 2020 (UTC)
 * My apologies! - I've had a busy week but can start going through your feedback right now. Thanks for the bump. XuLily (talk) 19:04, 5 February 2020 (UTC)
 * No rush, just wondering if you found the page  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 19:29, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Taxonomic synonyms should be listed in the taxobox instead of the lead. Add the parameters |synonyms= and make a bulleted list, and then add |synonyms_ref=
 * Finished 2 bullet points above. XuLily (talk) 19:38, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * "Ae. taeniorhynchus is attributed to taxon author Wiedemann, with naming dated to 1821. Alternate namings for the species include Culex taeniorhynchus (Wiedemann, 1821) and Ochlerotatus taeniorhynchus (Wiedemann, 1821). As a result, the species falls within the Ochlerotatus subgenus" this is very odd wording. Also, I'm sure Wiedemann has a first name and probably an article you could link to. Generally we do "[Nationality] [credentials] [first name] Wiedemann described Ae. (Ochlerotatus) taeniorhynchus in 1821." Also, check out the taxonomy sections of GA/FA diptera articles to see what else they detail. Add close relatives or other members of the subgenus Ochlerotatus (unless there's more than 10). Why did he assign it to the genus and subgenus he did?
 * [In Progress] I reworded the opening sentence for the Taxonomy section following your format. I will plan to review some other taxonomy sections and add information about relatives / genus/subgenus assignment and will update this bullet point when done. — Preceding unsigned comment added by XuLily (talk • contribs) 19:49, 5 February 2020 (UTC)


 * For the instar, pupa, adult images in life cycle, use   User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 01:19, 9 February 2020 (UTC)
 * I rearranged these images with multiple images - thanks! Do you think the adult female picture should also go with this multiple images group of pictures? I moved it to a different section for now since I thought it was a little repetiive to have the adult male and adult female together. Wondering what your thoughts are on this? XuLily (talk) 22:59, 10 February 2020 (UTC)
 * It's fine, add the parameter |direction=vertical  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)


 * Do we need "manifesting as low heterozygosity and low allelic richness"?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink genetic diversity  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * First sentence of Taxonomy is written weirdly, should be "In 1821, German entomologist Christian Rudolph Wilhelm Wiedemann gave the insect the species name taeniorhynchus, but unsure if it should be placed in the genus Aedes, Culex, or Ochlerotatus." Then you need to add future authors who included it in Aedes and why they did, or maybe Wiedemann came back some time later and concluded it belonged to Aedes  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "Aedes niger, also known as Aedes portoricensis, is a subspecies of Ae. taeniorhynchus" don't really understand, if it's a subspecies, shouldn't the name be A. t. niger, not just A. niger? Check the source if you read it right. Also, who first identified the subspecies?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * You should say where Wiedemann got his specimens from if such info is given  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The 3rd paragraph of Taxonomy is much longer and complicated than it needs to be. You can just say "Microsatellite DNA analysis shows that Ae. taeniorhynchus on the Galapagos Islands have genetic differences with the mainland populations, with minimal (interbreeding/gene flow) occurring only during rainy periods. Highland mosquitos [in the x mountains] have low genetic diversity, likely due to egg dormancy during dry spells" And I don't really get how egg dormancy is related to genetic diversity  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:00, 11 February 2020 (UTC)
 * You seem to have gone inactive. I'll give 5 more days to respond before failing for inactivity <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:26, 21 February 2020 (UTC)