Talk:Aeroplankton/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)

Dunkleosteus77

 * "carried by the current of the wind" why not just "by the wind"? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – changed


 * "they are the atmospheric analogue to oceanic plankton" odd comparison to make, that's like saying dolphins are the oceanic analogue to land mammals, which I guess is true, but weird to say like that User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – gone


 * "Most of the living things that make up aeroplankton are very small to microscopic in size" what do you mean most? If it's large it's not planktonic is it? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – I was thinking of things like dandilion seeds and ballooning spiders


 * This is completely your choice but I find it's easier to read if you use the serial comma User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – changed
 * hit ctrl+F and type in " and " with the spaces to find all the places you may have missed User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)


 * If you're gonna say 40,000 with the comma, then you can't say 1000 without the comma User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – changed


 * Explain what peripatetic is User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – the word has gone


 * What is temporal water? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – changed to "temporary or intermittant water"


 * "to several hundred meters, and up to several kilometers" these are the same distance User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – changed to: "to several hundred meters, and up to several thousand meters"
 * why not "hundreds of thousands of meters"? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 05:29, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
 * – done


 * " Freshwater organisms that must 'cross the dry ocean' to enter new aquatic island systems will be passively dispersed more successfully than terrestrial taxa.[6] However, numerous taxa from both soil and freshwater systems have been captured from the air" I don't get how these 2 statements contradict each other User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – the unnecessary "however" has disappeared


 * " that might harbor different microbial communities" I feel like this is something we should know by now, seeing as we can pretty easily sample the air User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – gone


 * "flowering plants are 240-million-year-old" I don't see the relevance User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – it's talking about how old fossilised pollen can be. Still, I removed the comment.


 * "aeromycological research is considered to be very important" well if it wasn't important, it wouldn't exist, and the second half of the sentence is a fragment User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – reworded the sentence


 * "other sources consider pollen or pollution" why is this plural when there's only 1 other study User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – the source given is a review which discusses three further sources for thunderstorm asthma, refs 72–74


 * You don't really explain the ecological significance of aeroplankton, just how they harm people User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – working on adding a section to address this
 * it'd be better if it was discussed where relevant, like the ecological benefits of fungus dispersal in the Fungal spores section User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * – The Microbiome section deals briefly with the ecology of aeroplankton. I can't find anything particularly significant in aeroplankton research which uses a tradition approach to ecology. Rather environmental airplankton samples are rapidly analyzed by high-throughput sequencing, an approach which sits well with the microbiome framework.


 * "The study of fungal spores in aeroplankton is called aeromycology" this is superfluous, especially because it's far from where you first mention the word User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – gone


 * Why are Pteridophytes not included in the Pollen section? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – but don't ferns produce spores rather than pollen?


 * "while pollen grains and fern spores can reach a similar content (10–100 m−3)" sounds like you meant a similar content to fungi User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 00:34, 25 December 2021 (UTC)
 * – reworded

Thank you! I'm now starting to work through the issues. — Epipelagic (talk) 04:52, 27 December 2021 (UTC)
 * I'll try to pick up tomorrow or day after User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 05:29, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
 * are there any further issues to address? - — Epipelagic (talk) 19:00, 4 January 2022 (UTC)


 * I feel like the first 2 sentences of the 2nd par of Fungal spores say about the same thing User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * – trimmed


 * "Fungi capable of travelling extensive distances with wind despite natural barriers, such as tall mountains, may be particularly relevant to understanding the role of fungi in plant disease" are the sources being this vague or are they saying they'll be more infectious? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "Notably, the presence of numerous fungal organisms pathogenic to plants has been determined in mountainous regions" a very general statement coming from a case study of just a single small area in Norway, and it doesn't seem to important to specifically mention anyways User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "asthma is associated with fungi" do you mean contracting asthma or asthma attacks? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "However, other sources consider pollen or pollution as causes of thunderstorm asthma" why isn't this mentioned in the pollen section? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * The first par of the Arthropods section doesn't have a ref User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "nematodes account for only about one percent of wind-drifted animals" what makes up the other 99%? You could use Template:Pie chart as a good graphical representation User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "within a few days of forming temporary waters such as phytotelmata" such as is not the right wording here User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "A stream of unicellular airborne microorganisms circles the planet above weather systems but below commercial air lanes" can you give the actual altitudes? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "In 2018, scientists reported" be consistent with how you call specific studies. Earlier you said the lead author, et al. User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "Previous work has shown" previous to who? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "many tourists are exposed to the most extreme negative impacts of airborne microalgae" what impacts? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "by most Earth surfaces" Earth is not an adjective User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "Given that the atmosphere is a large conveyor belt that moves air over thousands of kilometers, microorganisms are disseminated globally.[107][108][109] Airborne transport of microbes is therefore likely pervasive at the global scale" you already said this in the first par User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "the low microbial biomass associated with a high diversity existing in the atmosphere outdoor (∼102–105 cells/m3)" I don't understand what this is saying User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "thus requiring reliable sampling procedures and controls" this is the bare minimum for doing science User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "However, the interplay between microbes and atmospheric physical and chemical conditions is an open field of research that can only be fully addressed using multidisciplinary approaches" this sentences adds nothing User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "Few studies have been performed to determine the number of cyanobacteria and microalgae in the atmosphere [125][126] However, it was shown in 2012 that the average quantity of atmospheric algae is between 100 and 1000 cells per cubic meter of air" you're missing a period and these statements don't contradict each other User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "as diverse as epidemiology, including phytopathology,[133] bioterrorism, forensic science, and public health" sounds like everything listed here is a field of epidemiology User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "More precisely concerning the latter, airborne microorganisms contribute to the pool of particles nucleating the condensation and crystallization of water and they are thus potentially involved in cloud formation and in the triggering of precipitation" you already said this User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * "As stressed by these studies attempting to decipher and understand the spread of microbes over the planet,[145][112][146] concerted data are needed for documenting the abundance and distribution of airborne microorganisms, including at remote and altitudes sites" this sounds like you're applying for grant money User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Why is the Unicellular microorganisms separated from the Bioaerosols section? User:Dunkleosteus77 User talk:Dunkleosteus77 21:27, 4 January 2022 (UTC)