Talk:After Last Night/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:37, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

I will crack on with this right away! --K. Peake 07:37, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
❌ The sentence should start with the name of the song
 * WP:OVERLINK of D'Mile under producer(s) since I think he can be recognized from his name in songwriter(s)
 * Mention in the opening sentence that it is from their debut studio album
 * "It was solely released as an urban contemporary radio single" → "It was released to urban adult contemporary radio as the fifth single from the album" with the wikilink and moving the date with labels to the end
 * Place the writing sentence as the second one of the first para, then production and followed by release
 * ""After Last Night" was written by" → "The song was written by" and shouldn't you use .Paak's stage name in prose since he is a main subject?
 * "Jeremy Reeves and Ray Charles McCollough II." → "Jeremy Reeves, and Ray Charles McCollough II."
 * "Reeves and McCollough II," → "Reeves, and McCollough II,"
 * ""After Last Night" is a" → "It is a"
 * Pipe funk to Funk music
 * "The track received positive reviews" → ""After Last Night" received positive reviews"
 * see above
 * Either use the track or the song, not both. --K. Peake 07:46, 2 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 08:06, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

✅
 * "who noted the track's sexiness" → "who noted the sexiness"
 * "praised Thundercat and Collins's appearance." → "praised Thundercat and Collins's appearances."
 * "on Billboard Hot 100 and 17" → "on the US Billboard Hot 100 and number 17"
 * Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
 * "this led the album to become" → "this led An Evening with Silk Sonic to become"
 * Mention the release year of Toni Braxton's self-titled album
 * "also sang "After Last Night"" → "also sang the song" and this is fine being in the lead because there's no promotion section possible as far as I'm aware

Background and release
✅
 * This section is severely lacking in background; you can easily add info about how the members of Silk Sonic became involved with each other
 * "He furthered, "everything" → "He furthered that "everything"

Production

 * If the above section is not expanded to more than one para, merge this with it as the second para and retitle to Background and production
 * How do you want me to proceed with it after adding more info? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:02, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

✅
 * Remove wikilink on Thundercat
 * "Jeremy Reeves and Ray McCullough II." → "Jeremy Reeves, and Ray McCullough II."
 * "D'Mile and the latter four" → "D'Mile, and the latter four"
 * "played guitar while D'Mile also played guitar, piano and" → "played guitar, while D'Mile also played the instrument, piano, and"
 * Remove wikilink on Bootsy Collins
 * "the viola and Ron Kerber" → "the viola, and Ron Kerber" with the wikilink
 * Wikilink flute
 * "Tess Varley and Chris Jusell played" → "Tess Varley, and Chris Jusell played"
 * Pipe Cincinnati, Ohio to Cincinnati
 * "in Virginia Beach. John Hanes" → "in Virginia Beach, while John Hanes"

Composition
✅
 * Audio sample looks good!
 * "where Sonic sing a" → "where Silk Sonic sing a" since this is not the surname, also pipe chorus to Refrain
 * "neo soul and" → "neo soul, and" plus shouldn't you add slow jam per AllMusic?
 * "and as she talks Thundercat is" → "and as she talks, Thundercat is"
 * Italicise ooos
 * "singing simultaneously about" → "both singing about" to be less confusing
 * "and who is able to make a" → "and able to make a"
 * "a detail which is made pleasant due to Mars's" → "a detail which is added to by Mars's" to be less biased
 * "is in the key of" → "is set in the key of"
 * "Jem Aswad writing for Variety described" → "Jem Aswad, writing for Variety, described"
 * Invoke [5] at the end of the similarities sentence too
 * "The lyrics were compared to" → "The lyrics were compared by him to"
 * "Jon Dolan writing for Rolling Stone affirmed" → "Jon Dolan, for Rolling Stone, affirmed"

Critical reception
✅
 * Retitle to Reception and merge with the following section
 * The word charm does not need speech marks around it
 * "is one of the most seductive tracks by Mars's" → "amplifies the seductiveness of Mars's"
 * "as "smooth and funky" and "chill"." → "as "smooth[,] funky", and "chill"." for correct grammar
 * Reading Ye without the context reminded of my man for a moment, though he has been introduced earlier in the article so this is fine!
 * "In a mixed review, Sheldon Pearce, for The New Yorker," → "In a mixed review for The New Yorker, Sheldon Pearce"
 * Invoke [22] after both of The New Yorker sentences
 * Italicise No Ripcord
 * "from their rigid template". Rivers added that" → "from their rigid template", adding that"

Commercial performance
✅
 * Make this the third para of the above section
 * "on Billboard Hot 100 chart." → "on the US Billboard Hot 100."
 * "the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs at" → "the US Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart at"
 * Pipe NZ Top 40 Singles Chart to Official New Zealand Music Chart
 * Start a new sentence at "this achievement"

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 09:25, 28 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I will try to finish it during this weekend. I also left some questions. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:18, 31 March 2023 (UTC)
 * I believe I have addressed every issue, but please let me know if I missed something. I also left questions regarding the lead and production. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 08:08, 2 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, no issues are remaining and I did some brief copy editing; you were very smooth in dealing with all the comments! --K. Peake 08:45, 2 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:41, 2 April 2023 (UTC)