Talk:Agnes Gavin

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Review
Your article has a lot of potential and is short and sweet. I don't know if it would possible for you to develop further aspects of her life for instance, because you do peek people's interest but I wanted to read more upon Agnes Gavin. Also in her filmography, it would be helpful to state her role in each film, for a more advanced article. Other than that your article is very well written, Good Job !! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Annamariaharb (talk • contribs) 23:06, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hey,

You were able to find a fair amount of information on Gavin and it is interesting to read. I don't know if you were able to find any more details about her career because this section is rather short. You make up for it with the filmography and the works that follow but it would be interesting to have a more in-depth look at her career.

Some people have put the filmography into a table which could be a cool idea if you wanted to do that. You could also add what role she played in each film.

I would suggest fixing this sentence: 'In an early marriage she had a daughter named Isadore, she later died in 1917'. I would change it to 'In an early marriage she had a daughter named Isadore who later died in 1917'. The way it is written now has to many 'she's and so it is unclear who you are talking about.

Overall it is a good article and you managed to find a lot of information on the work she has done.

Peanuts.ohhenry (talk) 00:30, 18 March 2016 (UTC)