Talk:Air Hong Kong/GA1

GA Review
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Comments: I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 00:55, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) The lead of the article is a little short. Can more information be added?  Expanded as requested. Aviator006 (talk) 04:09, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) The sentence "Air Hong Kong was established in November 1986, commenced charter services with a Boeing 707-320C freighter on 4 February 1988, to Bombay (now known as Mumbai), Britain and Kathmandu; and scheduled services began on 18 October 1989." is wordy and needs to be split.  Splitted the sentence at '...in November 1986.  The airline commenced...' Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) The sentence "In March 1992, Air Hong Kong was granted additional traffic rights to Cairns, Darwin, Dhaka, Dubai, Kathmandu, Kuala Lumpur and Townsville; and by March 1993, the airline operated scheduled cargo services to Brussels, Dubai, Ho Chi Minh City, Manchester, Nagoya and Singapore with a fleet of two Boeing 747-100SF and one Boeing 707-320C freighters." needs to be split into two.  Splitted the sentence at '...Kuala Lumpur and Townsville.  By March 1993, the airline...' Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) "By the turn of the millennia" sounds awkward in this context. "By 2000" would work better.  Updated as suggested. Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) The sentence "The airline's parent, Cathay Pacific, acquired the remaining 25 percent of the airline's shares in February 2002 and became a wholly owned subsidiary; and an operational restructure followed on 1 July, where Air Hong Kong ceased services to Brussels, Dubai and Manchester to focus on services in Asia." needs to be split into two.  Splitted the sentence at '...became a wholly owned subsidiary.  An operational restructure followed...' Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Remove comma after "airline" in "In October 2002, Cathay Pacific entered into a joint venture agreement with DHL Worldwide Express (DHL) by selling a 30 percent stake in the cargo airline, in exchange for funds to purchase medium-size freighters to operate DHL's network in the Asia-Pacific region from Hong Kong."  Updated as suggested. Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) The sentence "As of 29 July 2009 (2009 -07-29)[update], the airline has a fleet of eight Airbus A300-600F General Freighters with services to Bangkok, Beijing, Manila, Nagoya, Osaka, Penang, Seoul, Shanghai, Singapore, Taipei and Tokyo." seems redundant to the Destinations section.  Sentence removed as suggested. Aviator006 (talk)
 * 8) Citation needed to indicate Mumbai, Kathmandu, and Ho Chi Minh City as terminated destinations.  Citation added. Aviator006 (talk) 02:32, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) The Fleet section seems redundant in mentioning the fleet and then providing a table.  Removed reference to number in the fleet, retained the remainder of the sentence to read, 'The airline was the launch customer for the Airbus A300-600F General Freighter, which is a new variant of the Airbus A300-600F.' Aviator006 (talk) 03:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments 1-7 and 9 reviewed and updated in the article. However, comment 8 is unable to be cited as it is implied.  These destinations are determined as 'terminated' on the fact that there were articles (reference) to say that Air HK operated to them in the past, while Air HK's website listed the current destinations, hence, it is implied that Air HK no longer operates to these 'terminated' destinations.  If you prefer me to cite the evidence of the past operations and current destinations, to give the (implied) conclusion of the fact they are terminated, please let me know.  Aviator006 (talk) 04:09, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * If by article, you are talking about Wikipedia articles, then that would not work. I would still prefer to see a citation added that these are terminated destinations. Dough4872 (talk) 15:54, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * I have added two citations per terminated destination, one to show when it was operating, the other to show the airline's current network and these destinations are no longer there. Aviator006 (talk) 02:32, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I will now pass the article. Dough4872 (talk) 00:39, 2 August 2009 (UTC)

I'm not sure
I'm not sure what this -- "hoeng1 gong2 waa4 man4 hong4 hung1 jau5 haan6 gung1 si1" -- in the lead is actually comunicating, and I'll bet there are many, many readers who are flummoxed by it. Why do we need it? This is en.wiki after all. Moriori (talk) 01:03, 12 July 2010 (UTC)