Talk:Aja (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 08:24, 12 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Language	English → Not needed.
 * "Aja" is the title track of Steely Dan's 1977 album by that name. → "Aja" is a song by American rock band Steely Dan from their sixth album of the same name (1977).
 * Like the other six songs on the album, → Irrelevant
 * it is in the jazz rock genre, → it is a jazz rock song
 * though it is regarded as tending strongly towards the former. → So, a jazz song with rock influences?
 * Musically, it is a tonally sophisticated and structurally complex work that was praised on its release as the most ambitious song the duo had ever attempted. → This is only attributed to one source, as some parts of the source don't quite match this sentence. I think it is being interpreted a little bit.
 * Why is so complex? What makes it complex?
 * escape the stresses of his life "up on the hill." → Are these lyrics?
 * Supposedly it was inspired by a relative of someone Fagen knew, → This clause is structured wrong, but it also reads fans written.
 * "tranquility that can come of a quiet relationship with a beautiful woman."[3] → Quotes are generally discouraged from being used in the lead.
 * and unlike many of the other tracks on the album, → There's only six, according to the first paragraph, so this reads a bit odd.
 * Both combined for solos → I don't understand this.
 * Gadd continued his, the first drum solo in a Steely Dan song,[5] in the song's tag, all recorded in just two takes. → This is really jumbled up.
 * It has been a favorite of the band's fans,[8] → If this is in the main body, then it doesn't need a citation here.
 * You don't mention the producer in the lead.
 * The whole lead is a bit messy. It needs rewriting.
 * A lot of the first paragraph of the Background section is not relevant. This song is from their sixth album, so we don't need info from 6 years previous as to before they formed. That is needed on the first, and perhaps second, album only. But this is a song article, so it's not needed even more so.
 * You would add The Village Recorder to the parameter for Recorded in the info box.
 * ✅ Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Gary Katz produced, → Gary Katz produced the song,
 * Reworded. Daniel Case (talk) 05:34, 25 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Words such as 'Ultimately', 'Eventually', 'Supposedly' read really fan-written and you shouldn't use them.
 * Drum solo section opens with a quote to no prior explanation of what its significance is or who is meant to have said it.
 * Avoid one line paragraphs like in Reception and Samples.
 * There's an awful lot of content in the Recording and Composition sections. They are very detailed and very big. These could easily be condensed and streamlined.
 * You say its a fan favourite in the Legacy section but I can't see anything that supports that.
 * WhoSampled is not a reliable source. I checked at RSN and it was confirmed as such.
 * There are am incredible amount of quotes in this article. Some need to be paraphrased into your own words for sure.

I'm sorry but I'm failing this article. I can see you've put a lot of time into this article, but I don't think it meets Good Article criteria. If I felt that the issues should be done within seven days, I would have placed on hold. But I think that many sections need completely rearranging and rewriting. And for that, i suggest nominating the article for a Peer Review or asking for it to be thoroughly copyedited by a member of the GOCE. — Calvin999 17:51, 17 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Outcome