Talk:Akira Warabi

I realize that these anime pages are often taken, word for word translations, from the Japanese; but this article really needs cleaning up. Wikipedia gets enough flak for being in poorly written English. I know that its translated from the Japanese but, being the English version of Wikipedia and not the Japanese one, more free Translations need to be made. For instance:

"He encountered a traffic accident at way home of the family travel, and became a dead person."

While this makes some sense in English ("at way home of the family travel" is meaningless; however), the construction is poor and word choice is strange. A better translation of this would be,

"While travelling home with his family, Akira was involved in a traffic accident and killed."

I'm also assuming his family was killed as well? So then one could say,

"While travelling home, Akira and his family were involved in a traffic accident in which they were all killed."

But that's a bit wordy, one could say,

"While travelling home, Akira and his family were involved in a fatal traffic accident."

Yanqui9 21:57, 24 January 2007 (UTC)