Talk:Al-Mu'tadid/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 05:32, 4 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll start this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 05:32, 4 October 2013 (UTC)


 * External links are good, but 3 DABs that need to be resolved
 * This confused me: following the death of Ibn Tulun, Abu'l-Abbas was sent against his son and heir, Khumarawayh The genealogy is complicated enough that I initially thought that Khumarawayh was another son of Al-Muwaffaq, so clarify that he's Tulun's son and heir.
 * "a keen horseman and took care to inspect both his troops and their mounts in person" (Hugh N. Kennedy) Is Kennedy the source of the quote? If so, provide a page number, although you can put it in the ordinary cite format if you like.
 * Typo: especially due tot he proximity
 * Put your titles in title case.
 * What country is Harlow in?
 * Images appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:10, 6 October 2013 (UTC)


 * Suggestions taken care of, except for the "keen horseman" quote, which is already covered by the reference at the end of the sentence. Anything else, particularly in terms of readability/comprehensibility? Constantine  ✍  16:58, 6 October 2013 (UTC)