Talk:Al-Muhallab ibn Abi Sufra/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cplakidas (talk · contribs) 18:33, 19 May 2019 (UTC)

Will start this soon. Constantine  ✍  18:33, 19 May 2019 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

I've made a first pass, looks really good. I've highlighted any issues I found, and made a few suggestions, above. Cheers, Constantine  ✍  07:34, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * "between the mid-640s and his death and served successive terms" recommend splitting after "death"
 * "against the Persians" link to the Sasanian Empire
 * "in Iraq and Khurasan in 683–684" add "during the Second Muslim Civil War" for context and for introducing the term
 * "switched allegiance to Caliph" -> "switched allegiance to the Umayyad caliph"
 * "Al-Hajjaj made al-Muhallab governor of Khurasan in 698 and from there, he recommenced the Arab conquests in Transoxiana, leading a two-year-long siege of the Kish fortress" recommend splitting after "698", and "fortress of Kish" is better
 * "in circa 632." you might want to consider using the template.
 * "from the "Azd Sarat", which was based in western Arabia" either "from the "Azd Sarat" tribe, which...", or "from the "Azd Sarat", who...
 * "Khurasan and Iraq ultimately came under the suzerainty of the anti-Umayyad, Mecca-based caliph, Abd Allah ibn al-Zubayr (r. 683–692)," first, use the template; second and optional, perhaps it might be useful to note the dependence of Khurasan from Iraq, like "Iraq, and Khurasan with it, came under...".
 * "at the Battle of Maskin.[20][8]" put the references in numerical order
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * High-quality sources have been used throughout. No close paraphrasing detected based on the EI article and a spotcheck of the other sources.
 * Add locations to Shaban (1970), Wellhausen (1927), and Wink (2002). Wellhausen also needs an OCLC.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * From my knowledge of the subject, and with the EI article as a guide, it looks complete, and follows WP:SS. I don't see any major reference work or study on the period missing, apart perhaps from Kennedy's Great Arab Conquests, which has a few comments on Muhallab, especially his siege of Kish and his (and Yazid's) status among the Azd. I recommend adding him (I can send you the relevant passages).
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Thanks for reviewing the article. I’ve addressed all of the aforementioned issues and have taken your helpful suggestions. I don't have full access to the Kennedy book that you've recommended, so please send those relevant passages. Cheers, —Al Ameer (talk) 02:12, 27 May 2019 (UTC)
 * I've added the relevant material from Kennedy. Thanks again ;) Please revise any recent changes/additions as you see fit. --Al Ameer (talk) 18:16, 27 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Looks good, made some tweaks. Happy to pass this, well done :). Constantine  ✍  19:19, 27 May 2019 (UTC)