Talk:Al Ahed FC/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:54, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

Will do a review on this. MWright96 (talk) 20:54, 12 February 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "Ahed are also affiliated with Hezbollah. Recently, Ahed have developed a fierce rivalry with Nejmeh, which are also based in Beirut." - more concise; Hezbollah, and are fierce rivals with fellow Beirut club Nejmeh.

Early history

 * "However, due to the Israeli invasion of Lebanon in 1982, the club stopped its activities." - better and more neutral The club stopped playing as a consequence of the Israeli invasion of Lebanon in 1982.
 * The references attached to the sentence should be in numerical order
 * "However, the match ended 1–1, and Ahed were not promoted to the Premier League." - better; The match ended 1–1 to prevent Ahed from being promoted to the Premier League.

Lebanese Premier League (1992-2005)

 * "because the club's leaders wanted a name" - its to avoid close reptition of "club"
 * "After two seasons in the top flight," - more formal Premier League
 * "but were then promoted back to the Premier League." - more neutral before they earned promotion back
 * "but were then promoted back to the Premier League.[4][3]" - refs should be in numerical order
 * "Sherri resigned from club president " - as
 * "Ahed won two FA Cups and one Federation Cup.[4][3][5]" - same issue as the third point in this sub-section

Domestic and contintental success (2008–present)

 * "Under the presidency of Tamim Sleimen," - not mentioned by the www.rsssf.com source attached to it. Please use another source to verify this portion of text
 * "Ahed became the three-time defending champions, a position held only one other time" - more concise and formal; a position held once before
 * "they kept nine clean sheets, including five consecutive ones in five knock-out matches," - better to avoid some close reptition of the sources; they had nine clean sheets, including five in a row in five knockout matches,

Stadium

 * Perphaps give a brief mention of Hezbollah are to the casual reader?

Supporters

 * "Ahed's fan base mainly comes from the Shia community in Beirut." - Ahed's fan base primarly consists of Beirut's Shia community.
 * "he team has strong ties with the Shia militant group Hezbollah," - delink Hezbollah because it is already linked in the previous section; also what Hezbollah means should be mentioned in the stadium subsection

Asian record

 * "knocked them out 3–4 on aggregate." - more formal; eliminated them