Talk:Alamogordo, New Mexico/GA1

GA Review
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 * GA review (see here for criteria)

Preliminary comments: I appreciate your concerns over the withdrawal of the nomination, and then resubmission. The length of time it takes to get a review has nothing (or at least little) to do with the date you submit it; it has everything to do with who picks up the article to review, and at this point there aren't enough reviewers to take care of the submissions. Drop me a line on my talk page when you want me to come read the whole thing again and give you a response. Good luck improving the article. Auntieruth55 (talk) 19:07, 11 October 2009 (UTC)
 * First, very interesting article and nicely done. I've made a few minor tweaks in the lead and the history. Generally, your prose is choppy, caused by repetition of the same sentence structure and the use of complicated verb construction.  You might take another look, and simplify where you can.  I also tweaked out "first known settlement" because this contradicts what you say later.  We know there were earlier settlements, and they were "permanent" -- or as permanent as Clovis settlements were, for example.  I suspect it's more reasonable to refer to the city as the present settlement.
 * Second, you have some link rot, and broken links--these are marked with templates. Please fix.
 * Third, in your effort to be complete, you have included many one sentence paragraphs, so that you can touch on all these topics, but there is little depth there. Is there either more you can add, or can you amalgamate them into other, related discussions?
 * Fourth, your image on the Desert Dawgs has some vandalism too it. Will you deal with that, or eliminate the image?


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * choppy prose, contradictions
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * very "presentist" states that there were settlements there dating back centuries, and refers to current settlement as "first"...confusing.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Article remained on hold for 10 days, and no effort made to deal with it.
 * Uncia and I are the main editors (others are welcomed). Uncia is on a long wikibreak.  I am celebrating Deepavali, which in 2009 is a once in a lifetime event since it falls in the month of purattasi.  I am very motivated to work on it later in the month so please allow us.  Uncia nominated this for GA and I concurred. Suomi Finland 2009 (talk) 15:35, 20 October 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Article remained on hold for 10 days, and no effort made to deal with it.
 * Uncia and I are the main editors (others are welcomed). Uncia is on a long wikibreak.  I am celebrating Deepavali, which in 2009 is a once in a lifetime event since it falls in the month of purattasi.  I am very motivated to work on it later in the month so please allow us.  Uncia nominated this for GA and I concurred. Suomi Finland 2009 (talk) 15:35, 20 October 2009 (UTC)