Talk:Alan (footballer, born 1989)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cloudz679 (talk · contribs) 22:12, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

The tone, jargon and grammar in this article is below standard, also glossing over important parts of his career, failing criteria 1. Issues with the prose number over 50% of the sentences within the article. There is a dead link, tagged in January; also some original research and statistical inaccuracy appears to feature in the article (criteria 2). The fulfilment of criteria 3 is not clear; main aspects are glossed over as noted above. Criteria 4, 5 and 6 are met. Although I am including a list of particular points below, the article is a long way from meeting point 1 of the criteria, and the appropriate action at this time is to leave the article as not listed:


 * "After failing to make any impact in Brazil with Londrina and Fluminense," doesn't seem to reflect his time at the second club, in particular
 * "after playing nearly 130 matches for the Austrian side and scoring nearly 100 goals"
 * No info about his time at Londrina, except signing. Text suggests it was a non-professional arrangement, without committing.
 * "Brasileiro" doesn't seem to be a common name for the Campeonato Brasileiro Série A
 * "He made his debut for the club in UEFA Champions League qualifier against Hapoel Tel Aviv which his team lost 2–3."
 * "In that match he came as a 67th minute substitute for Franz Schiemer."
 * "In his first season with the club, Alan scored a hat-trick against Sturm Graz on 16 April 2011."
 * "Alan also scored braces"
 * "Alan started the 2011–12 season by scoring a hat-trick against Latvian side FK Liepājas Metalurgs." what type of match?
 * "His goal scoring streak continued as he scored a brace against FK Senica[13] as well as scoring in a defeat against AC Omonia" what matches, what results, remove jargon
 * "However his playing time in his second season with the Austrian club was limited as he ruptured his cruciate ligament in a league match against Rapid Vienna on 28 August 2011 and was ruled out of action for at least six months."
 * "Alan got back on training"
 * "did not play in any continental match" what does this mean?
 * "The 2013–14 season proved to be the most successful season for the Brazilian striker, becoming a goalmachine."
 * "the same feat would also be achieved by his Spanish partner"
 * "He also received two red cards - one against SV Ried and another against FC Basel in an UEFA Europa League encounter."
 * "officially announced"
 * "Alan played three matches for the Brazil U20 in an unofficial tournament."
 * "Alan called himself as half-Austrian"
 * "However his move to Guangzhou Evergrande dented the hope of playing for Austria as he was only six months shy of five years while joining the Chinese outfit."
 * "He has also been said as "strong, energetic, skilled""
 * "Alan is equally adept in his both left and right foot"
 * Stats don't add up, e.g. Red Bull Salzburg league appearances do not total 89 as stated
 * Fluminense stats for 2008 (league, international) are not included within the citation (OR?)
 * 2011/12 cup stats are not included within the citation (OR?)
 * 2010/11 continental stats are different from those listed at the citation (OR?)

C679 07:40, 29 March 2015 (UTC)