Talk:Alan Pastrana/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:46, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:46, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * "is an American former football quarterback." modify to 'former American football quarterback' with qb and af linked
 * Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)


 * I'd throw a bit of his coaching career in the lead as well, since it's a bit short as is.
 * Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)


 * "on the defense" on defense
 * Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)


 * "cartilage and his medial collateral ligament" do you mean 'cartilage in his' or did he tear that elsewhere?
 * I believe these are separate pieces of tissue, the MCL being a ligament. Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)


 * "he saw action in two games, and did" that comma's not needed.
 * Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)


 * "where he was still teaching as of 2006" any update if he still is? that's a 4 year gap now.
 * Unfortunately, not that I could ascertain during my research. Strikehold (talk) 01:34, 25 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll put the article on hold for a week and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:36, 22 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:52, 25 November 2010 (UTC)