Talk:Alaska marmot/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 13:09, 27 February 2022 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up. Ealdgyth (talk) 13:09, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Done. Done.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Refs:
 * "The conflicting data pertaining to phylogeny creates inconsistent marmot lineage relationship hypotheses." needs a ref
 * Just removed since it didn't seem particularly important.
 * "Especially in large colonies, the Alaska marmots utilize sentry duty rolls that are periodically rotated." needs a ref
 * Done.
 * Current ref 11 ""Alaska Marmot (Marmota broweri)". Archived from the original on 28 December 2021. Retrieved 29 January 2022." lacks a publisher
 * Done.
 * Lead:
 * There should be a bit more in this lead - it should summarize the entire article - right now it just covers location, what they eat, their size, and the bit about the government making them have a holiday.
 * Done.
 * Evolution:
 * "The Alaska marmot has ancestry to the Pleistocene epoch" - awkward - suggest "The Alaska marmot's ancestry traces to the Pleistocene epoch."
 * Done.
 * "There have been no known fossils of Marmota broweri." awkward - suggest "There are no known fossils of Marmota broweri."
 * Done.
 * "However, the M. flavescens fossil recovered from the Late Pleistocene age from the Trail creeks caves on the Seward Peninsula[12] is speculated to be an incorrect identification of the fossil[5] This fossil could be M. broweri." Several issues here. There either needs to be a period after "of the fossil." or we need to integrate the "This fossils could be.." phrase. Suggest "incorrect identification which could be M. broweri."
 * Done.
 * "In addition, somatic chromosome analysis of marmots, ecological data and behavioral data have shown that there is a link" clunky - suggest "In addition, somatic chromosome analysis, ecological data, and behavioral data have shown that there is a link"
 * Done.
 * "Current distribution of the Alaska marmot include the Brooks Range, Ray Mountains, and Kokrines Hills.[15] They exist in the mountains that lie north of the Yukon and Porcupine rivers in central and northern Alaska." Clunky - suggest "Alaska marmots inhabit the mountains that lie north of the Yukon and Porcupine rivers in central and northern Alaska - including the Brooks Range, Ray Mountains, and Kokrines Hills."
 * Done.
 * "each consisting of various families." do you mean "several families"?
 * Done.
 * Habitat:
 * "pelage fur" link? And this sentence would work better in description
 * This was a mistake, which I have fixed.
 * Anatomical distinctions:
 * link "retina" and "rods"
 * Done.
 * link "fovea"
 * Done.
 * Hibernation:
 * "They then resettle in their dens in family units to communally hibernate for the winter." but if the last chronological mention is for May so ... the "then resettle" makes no sense as this would be summer ...
 * Fixed.
 * "In order to seal their hibernaculum off from the elements, they will plug their entrance with hay, earth, and stone." this has already been mention, redundant here or there... pick one spot and only mention it once
 * *Done.
 * did you mean to say something like "During hibernation many of their body functions decrease such as body temperature (averages between 4.5 °C (40.1 °F) and 7.5 °C (45.5 °F)), heart rates, respiratory rates."?
 * Done.
 * Hibernation:
 * "They then resettle in their dens in family units to communally hibernate for the winter." but if the last chronological mention is for May so ... the "then resettle" makes no sense as this would be summer ...
 * Fixed.
 * "In order to seal their hibernaculum off from the elements, they will plug their entrance with hay, earth, and stone." this has already been mention, redundant here or there... pick one spot and only mention it once
 * *Done.
 * did you mean to say something like "During hibernation many of their body functions decrease such as body temperature (averages between 4.5 °C (40.1 °F) and 7.5 °C (45.5 °F)), heart rates, respiratory rates."?
 * Reproduction:
 * "viviparous" link
 * Relationship with humans:
 * "An Eskimo hunter would spend all summer hunting marmots to make a parka, as it takes about 20 marmot pelts to make a single parka." suggest rewording to "Native hunters require at least 20 pelts to make a single parka, making it time consuming to hunt them for larger garments."
 * Done.
 * I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.
 * I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 15:04, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I've gotten everything. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 15:42, 2 March 2022 (UTC)


 * Looks good, passing now. Ealdgyth (talk) 17:13, 2 March 2022 (UTC)